i said i was lonely
i said i needed love
i tried to show my pain
i tried so damn hard to explain
i wanted you to see
why i act like a joke
can't let things go away
hold on to what you never say
CHORUS: but all that you told me
was you didn't know how to hold me
i bet you had a plan
long before things got out of hand
when i showed you my black
i should have known you'll run away
and as you turned your back
i guess i clearly heard you say
"that's not my shade of Grey!"
what did you have in mind
when you wrote me those lines
love,friendship what not shit?
i should have known we'd end like this!!
u always tried to prove
I'm wrong coz you are right
showed me love in your way
never heard what i had to say
CHORUS: and all that you told me
was you didn't know how to hold me
i bet you had a plan
long before things got out of hand
when i showed you my black
i should have known you'll run away
and as you turned your back
this is all that you had to say
"that's not my shade of Grey!"
Author notes
N - Not my shade of Grey
This is my first metered song in which i made a special effort so i wanna mention that it has a meter that goes like this
stanzas
6,6,6,8
6,6,6,8
chorus
6,8,6,8
6,8,6,8,6
The song is about how people make promises of sticking togetehr and then run at the slightest problem they encounter...how people find it so hard to accpet that their freind isn't perfect...i hope people can relate to it
Please tell me how you find this?
Written March 27th, 2006
A contest entry
- Not the one for me! by Procrastination.
450 points, ended July 31, 2007, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - feeling lost i want sappy stuff people by Pureisolation.
450 points, ended February 15, 2008, 45 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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wow, great write like the wya the poem just flowed and all, great job and good luck in the contest =)
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i can relate to your poem and i thank you for entering. I have been there before and i know exactly what you mean.. thank you for entering my contest.
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"when i showed you my black
i should have known you'll run away
and as you turned your back
this is all that you had to say
"that's not my shade of Grey!""
Wow, that is all I can bring myself to say, wow!
Goodluck in the contest.
Much love,
Emily x
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"when i showed you my black
i should have known you'll run away"
I really enjoyed those two lines. It was very effective without having to use too many tools and such.
Also, congrats on this being your first metered piece. I appreciate your effort, and wish you well in the contest.
-- Justin -
thanx i'm glad you liked it!! it's always nice when someone understands and enjoys your creation!!
Luv
VidZ -
Wow, I really enjoyed that. You showed that special person your dark side, the pain that has been in your life, you beared your all... and he ran away saying "that's not my shade of Grey!"
Very powerful, and the words were well thought out and placed.
~Pedro~
Edited on Mar 30, 2:53 because '"Typo"'. -
wow, another stunning piece, and it was your first metered song!? my my my, you never cease to amaze me.
I love how you're always willing to try something new. I would but i just dont think I know how, if you have any ideas or anything, let me know. I would love some sisterly advice.
well girlie, ill talk to you later!
GOOD LUCK!
*hugs*
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