“Rad a Tap Tap,” goes my foot against the floor,
as I play my tunes- as I play some more,
The piano I sit at is humming along,
As I play my piano and sing my song.
“Rad a Tap Tap.”
I couldn’t imagine a moment more pure,
As I play along- an emotional cure,
To bring pleasure with notes of joy,
The piano to me- is merely a toy.
The essence of my being.
People dance amongst the room,
As my fingers glide, as my fingers zoom,
Across the keys,
And I am invisible all people sees,
Is the music in the air.
They dance on the tattered floor soar,
With the marks of dancing from nights before,
As they get tiered, as they sit down,
I keep playing another round,
Beautiful music.
“Rad a Tap Tap goes my foot against floor,
as I play my toons- as I play some more
Author notes
this poem got silver
Written March 27th, 2006
A contest entry
- Off the Beaten Path by Shattered Remains.
600 points, ended October 17, 2008, 16 entries
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Very interesting poem, did know you could actually write a poem about playing the piano, you did a good job of it... Thank you for entering
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What a nice poem, with vivid auditory imagery. It had a rythm that went well with the theme. Thanks for the entry.
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I love when people play an instrument that I play - violin or piano- so I liked this poem a lot. I didn't feel the "Rap-a-Tap-Tap", but everything else was music to my ears. Pardon the pun. I'm kind of... stupid. lol Thank you for sharing your gift!
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this was a great poem.my favorite part was the first stanza. I love the verse rad a tap tap. my least favorite was the third stanza it was kinda confusing.this poem was full of music and make songs go in my head. I love the line rad a tap tap because it is such a cool line rad a tap tap. keep up the good work and good luck in the future.
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Wow that is really great. I play violen so I know exactly how that feels. I could imagine myself dancing do a really great piano beat and having fun with this pieace. I love it, you wrote this better then i could ever attempt. great job.
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Hmmm..... I had a difficult one placing this. Firstly GREAT flow and good happy feel (kind of what I am in need of), but something keeps shouting at me...... These are lyrics. I have not checked your comments board etc...., but these feel more like lyrics and good happy vibe ones at that.
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This poem is very pretty and mood enlightening, jsut rrading it puts me in a better mood. And i lvoe the way you used the imagery and just your words in general to put the reader write into the situation where they can choose to imagine playing the piano or dancing around, You did a wonderful job. grat write and please keep up the good work.
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i dont know how to explain it, i just really liked this... nice job
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Constructive critisism first. You need more of a set rhythmic form. It might be a little better if you structured it more. However, this has a beautiful tone, a nice feel to it. You get the audiences imagination working, which is great! Keep up the good work, I really like this. Music is something we can all lose ourselves in. :-)
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I love your ability to put the reader in the moment, to feel what you feel, see what you see. All the senses come alive through your words, Which is difficult but amazing when accomplished. It has a wonderful flow to it and in my mind is amazing, however; I believe I spot an error "as I play my toons" I believe you want the word "tunes" rather than "toons". Do keep writing, you show great talent and a solid dedication to your work.
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thats pretty magic
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It flows and ebbs like a gentle ripple in the sea.Great job
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Great poem, it flows and rhymes so well
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this is so cool!! i wanna be there!!!! sounds like so much fun to be both dancing and playing!!! it flows really great! i like it!! great job!!! ~kami
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