You tell me that you love me
And I was almost dumb enough to believe
But I found out the truth,
You don’t love me, and I no longer love you
I carry the burden that you placed upon me
Sometimes it gets hard just to slide by
I fell into a lie, but now I’ve opened my eyes
Thorns ride my spine
Your memory haunts my mind
I don’t know why I thought
You could be the one
Look at these scars!
Look at what you’ve done!
I had such a passion for you,
But it doesn’t matter anymore cause we’re through
And I’m never coming back!
Watch me as I fade to black!
And no matter how much I fade,
The memory remains
And the scars from you will never change
I’ve been set in stone
I’m all alone, I ran away
The only one who really loved me
All because of the one who tricked me!
I’m ruined!
Place me in my coffin
So I can search for peace
Because on this earth,
My whole life is ruined
I’ve been tricked into playing the fool
And now I shall eternally carry the scars from you
A contest entry
- The Broken R! by Ms Raneika.
600 points, ended March 9, 2007, 88 entries
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I really like this!
It reminds me of a song that I would play on repeat or something after a break-up. :]
I can feel so much genuine emotion from this.
these lines ripped my heart right out: Watch me as I fade to black!
And no matter how much I fade,
The memory remains
And the scars from you will never change -
Very burdensome. I'm glad it is over for you. All the best.
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if this is indeed true...I have something to tell you...your scars is only on your skin...they are a sign that his beating on you have heal...but what needs the most healing is within yourself...your heart...you can't forget about the past but you can have a better future...visit http://www.myspace.com/brhspower if you would like some hope and inspiration
thanks for entering my contest much love, Raneika
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The 4th paragraph was my favorite. I think its fair to say that's the climax of the poem. I can relate to it so much. I love reading your work because it allows me to get inside your head, even for a little while. It allows me to somehow be closer to you, and i love that.
Take kare hun. I'll talk to you soon im sure. All my Love.
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im sorry that i hurt you this much I didnt mean to. I never meant to make you think this.
kat
Edited on Mar 27, 10:47 p.m. because ''. -
am slightly confuzzled. are you talking about me here? please dont be. oh hey, paltalk (on my computer) is now non-existent, sorry hun. it's just here and phone that we can talk now.
but this is a great poem, it truly is. you tell a story of sorrow, and yet it still turns out beautiful.
Keep on writing hun, there are people who actually matter who love you an unbelievable ammount.
Me.
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This was aboslutely a greak work!! Dark, emotional, true...Loved it!!!! it was enjoyable reading, it really was. your expressions were great and I LOVE it!!!!
Sineana
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Wow, great work... I take it you've been abused? Well that guy should be the one in the coffin...He deserves to die... I'm sorry, but he does.
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