Waking up to butterflies,
Never expecting tears
Would fill my eyes.
Walking down the chalk-white halls,
Hopes so high,
But only to fall.
I saw her there against the door,
My beautiful one,
That I couldn't ignore.
But when I read the letter she wrote,
My breath left me,
Torn from my throat.
Refused was I.
When I had finally thought,
That I could fly.
My wings were robbed from me that day,
All of my thoughts
In disarray.
Then one day, I saw her again,
She said she'd be mine,
I was stunned yet again.
Our lips met in a hesitant kiss,
My vision spun,
In ecstatic bliss.
Then I woke up and my heart broke again,
Reliving the moment.
Now I sit with my pen...
Author notes
-Love freaking sucks, no? Obviously this is about when I approached one of my best friends and she said no. Sucks..
-And yes, I'm aware that in stanza seven, I rhymed 'again' and 'again'. You try thinking of something that rhymes with 'again' and fits into that sentence. lol.
-Comment, please. It'd be much appreciated. 
Written March 26th, 2006
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wow...this is just awe striking....i cant imagine me ever writting something like this....this just moves me i dont know how to say it but what i feel when i read this....wow i can really explain....great job! cant wait to read more!
--steph-- -
Love should be given my dear, not required or extruded. It is sad when love given is not returned, but you also need to realize what you are asking of someone your age.
Wait for the right love. When it is right it will be given freely, i promise. -
Hay i'm in school and should be on here but just want to say that rocked i got to go before i get seen
laters
xx Shadow xx -
Love sucks big time, that's all there is to say.
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holy shit you fuckin queef...that was fuckin awesome. not normal awesome but holy shit awesome. now back to what i was sayin... holy shit i wish i could write like that. the rhythem and rhyming was fuckin cool as hell. sad story though i've already herd it and already sympathized... i say sorry once again.... and i'm sorry you have to feel this way. i wish your dream of happiness with the one you love was true.n-e-ways,,, i gotta go cause ur bitchin at me on the phone cause i'm takin too long to type this meaningful..(but meaningless in a few days) comment. but i do feel for ya and i have felt and sadly still do feel the same way. i hope things get better for you.
love,
your so called herpes infected(not) best friend...caitlin -
Yes love does fucking suck. I would know. Rejection though really isnt the end of the world. Just keep trying and you will find someone. I swore to myself that i wouldnt. But after half a year i did. I still have my doubts. But i wouldnt let it get to me. Though, i wish you the best of luck. If you need anything im sure people will be there for you. Great job and keep up the great poetry.
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Rayne -
excellent
i love this piece, amazing job. great flow. excellent! keep writing pieces such as this and you will have me as a fan! hehe
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--chantel
blessed be
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Very Good
This is so true i am with you. But hey we can't control other peoples feeling and thoughts. Even thoe there desisions may hurt us we just have to live with and smile. By the way i love this peom it says alot. KEEP WRITING GOOD JOB!!!!!
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