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Reborn



The flicker of a dying flame.



The eyes of a shameful game.



Who am I to blame?



But the words within, I cannot tame.



Like a puddle of rain,



I am the product of pain.



Cursive written on the wall.



Signing the end of my fall.



But then everything goes away.



Until we start again.



And draw a new line.
  

 

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Written March 26th, 2006

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  • Whitelove
    March 31, 2006
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    Take a bow!

    Great expressions in this poem! I really liked it! Great job!!


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    March 26, 2006
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    kinda deep, a very good write. you have done a great job.

  • ContagisBlondnes
    March 26, 2006
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    Very powerful use of language; however, I feel as if there needs to be more depth to the words - they're shallow for a poem that speaks of death and heralds none.


  • Debbysmiles gold member
    March 26, 2006
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    You did an excellent job with this.. at the end there was a nreak in the ryhme.. though this may have neen intentional on your part. This feels like an injury to the soul. I hope it gets better ..
    Debby

  • deathbysuicide08
    March 26, 2006
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    this is powerfull and well written, it has a strong sence of life and how it will always be. great imagry. and i agree the spacing is very effective it sort of pulls you in for more. awsome job.


  • memorywitch20
    March 26, 2006
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    Love it love the ryming part it a really great poem .. the way you wrote it it looks like you or whoever this may be is sort of tired of the same routine like the same thing that goes ove and over anyways keep up the great work

    love it!!


  • Candy Holic Ferret
    March 26, 2006
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    this is so damn emotional, I love it! I like the rhyiming in it too. Esp. since it wasn't overdone or forced either.

  • bobb fett
    March 26, 2006
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    The feelings it makes me feel is like i've grown my left leg back. You inspire me to wash my glass eye 3 times more often and to get out of bed in the evening. Props to the man (or woman). you rock my socks brother (or sister)

  • buenaw
    March 26, 2006
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    Good to use rhyme and good to have passion, still needs some tweaking though


  • Ethereal One gold member
    March 26, 2006
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    very well written

    You express your emotions well in this poem. It sounds like the person in tired of the same old things of everyday life.
    The spacing is very effective.

    etherealforu

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