a storm rages within
the fight that never ends
between the abyss
and life
storm within
lightning inside
the abyss takes over
the heart becomes like thunder
screaming out to be heard
calling for a reason an endless cry of anguish
then life begins to come back
the heart becomes like lightning
charged with emotion
unpredictable and uncontrollable
life's trails beat down upon the heart
like the pounding rain
gentle yet dangerous
gently wearing down the reason inside
this endless battle is like
the storm you never know how it will end
until its over we can only hope for the best
Author notes
'I wanna be in Tasha's Mafia' yeah dont get this but o well proof i read the thingy
Written March 26th, 2006
A contest entry
- Username Contest by Alexandra Saint.
300 points, ended May 31, 2006, 16 entries
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Did you get into Tasha's Mafia XD
I like this, very freewritten. A good style and all. I really like all the paralels you draw to storms and hearts and battles. I like the use of the word 'abyss' in this, since it's just an awesome word placed really well and no one ever uses it anymore, so kudos for that.
I also like the last three lines a lot, tho it would be good if you could fix the typo in the last line. Doing spellcheck really makes a work look more professional; typos make a work seem sloppy, like a sketch.
Kudos!
Bekca.
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