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Dolphins

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           Splashing. Diving. Rolling
           Around in the water. Playing.
           Light gray skin reflecting

           The sun’s rays. Love and kindness
           Fills their eyes, their souls. Not a spec
           Of hatred in them. Enjoying the world

           That most let slip by. Smooth skin.
           Flying across the water. Amazing
           Beauty. Protectors of the seas...

Author notes

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I decided to try the same style as in my poem "A Crystal Snowflake" I'm not sure if this one turned out as good, but I thought it might be interesting. Please let me know what you think.

Picture was designed by me using Photoshop about a year ago.
Written March 25th, 2006

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  • Ragan
    October 17, 2006
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    That's awesome. I love dolphins. Have you ever touched one? They feel like rubber. I touched one my first time at Sea World in 9th grade.

  • Hend
    April 11, 2006
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    I love dolphins!!! Awesome poem!!!

    Hend


  • Pensively Ignorant
    March 28, 2006
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    I love this Tim, you rekindled me fire for my love of dolphins. s dolphins to death again. I have like a light that's a dolphin and I use to watch it all the time. Anyways! Your poemer. Or poem. Whichever the case. Anyways! Your poem was beautiful Tim, very good, I loved the verbs in this, esp. since I was picturing a dolphin do these things in my head. Excellent job dear!

    *God Bless*

    Sarah

  • Hello Im Human
    March 26, 2006
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    In the second stanza, third line did you mean "hated" or "hatred".....Moving on now...Wow! That picture is breathtaking! Even if it IS photoshoped This was beautiful, i thought the form/wording you used really brought out the best in your poem. It was so pure and visual even without the picture . Isnt it amazing what you see when you really stop to take a look around? Awesome poem! Hope it does well in the contest.
    'Til Later Dayz,
    X
    [-Human-]


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    March 26, 2006
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    This is a very beautiful piece. I could actually picture the dolphin in my mind. Keep up the awesome poetry!!!


  • ecclesiastes
    March 26, 2006
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    I like it a lot. Also, they way the format just skips from one thing to another also sort of imitates a dolphin, flowing carefree from one thing to another. I think it is good. Also in the first line, second stanza, you have "sun's raze", do you want "sun's rays"? Just wondering. Great job. God bless ya. *~*

  • lillmissunshine
    March 25, 2006
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    hey I liked this piece!!!!!!!!!! great job tim


  • beautifulbrat
    March 25, 2006
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    I love this write Tim. I love the visual. And of course you found another great picture to go along with the poem. I love it. Keep up the good work. Good luck in the contest!
    ~Shannon~


  • FireyAura
    March 25, 2006
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    I loved this! Great job! Your words made me feel like I could relate. They were so descripted! Awesome job and great picture, it is so majestic Good luck in this Contset!

    ~*Chelsea*~


  • lonelylover
    March 25, 2006
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    great picure and great write keep it up


  • abbyslover
    March 25, 2006
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    i like it it is a really good write

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