You broke down my walls
Found a way in
Through my tears
Through my cold touch
My world shatters
Falling
Falling over the edge
It pours into darkness
My confused mind in shreds
And tatters
Of star crusted cloth
I'm sailing on that boat
Sailing towards the edge
Of the world
Can I tell you I'm afraid?
Can I tell you I'm scared?
Of what will happen?
When I reach the edge
Why did you save me
My beautiful world
My fragile walls
No one would touch
So perfect
How do I tell you
You've become my
Star crusted sky
My sea
The very air I breath
My world?
Author notes
I'm not sure about this one, I keep on seeing mistakes I can fix; I have to keep telling myself 'leave it be or you'll spoil it.'
Written March 25th, 2006
A contest entry
- Beyond imagination ~ Drift glass.... by Lavender Butterfly.
300 points, ended March 26, 2006, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Glad you agree. My bro decided to be annoying and pointed out every little error.
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Thanks. I think it's sometimes it's my friends that save me the most, just like in the poem.
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You broke down my walls
Found a way in
Through my tears
wow-amazing
I really like this piece. It really shows who truly loves you-the people who keep on trying to get through....
Keep it up!!!
Pegleg -
beautiful
Ha yes, leave it be, it's beautiful. You painted such a lovely little fantasy world, your words werre brilliant. -
Thank you!
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Nice job!
This is a very wll penned piece. Nice job! Congrats on the trophy! Debi -
This is extremely touching and quite a stunning write. Thanks so much for this entry... x
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Beuatiful. Well written and touching. GOod luck
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