A poem that examines two separate things, parts of each stanza being about one thing, other parts about the other. Built to all most confuse the reader, forcing them to read it again. I'll explain it at the end.
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The slowly beating heart
Soft reminder of the truth
Nothing here seems changed
But we know that's not true.
Warm and soft her skin
Ecstasy, the simple touch
There is only silence now
Where once was someone we knew
Her breaths like soft caresses
Reminding me what's good in life
Color painted on in death
Reminds me of her painful strife
My hands hold gently her swollen stomach
I feel the little kicks
I lean down as a single tear falls
And give her one last kiss
I wouldn't trade a single thing
In all the world for this
The flesh and bone still laying there
She doesn't yet seem gone to miss
Her lips gently touch mine
It's paradise, her kiss
It has yet to truly sink in
I'll not be seeing her again like this
Happily ever after
And waiting for the pain
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Now. If you were wondering, the two things described here are as follows. The first thing described is laying in a warm bed with my wife, who is pregnant. The other is seeing my grandmother passed away, at her wake. I'm sure you can pick out which is which.
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Written March 24th, 2006
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There is a mature warmth t this piece that some years later would merit you a worthwhile feature of endearment. Keep it up, well done, I liked it very much.
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Hmmm...Interesting combination. Not something you'd normally see put together like this, but each half compliments the other. I probably should have read the explantion first though, otherwise it is truly confusing. But congrats on the baby. I hope your wife's doing okay, being pregnant is quite the experience I hear. When's the baby due?
P.S. Black font color on a dark purple background is very difficult to read.
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I really like how this was written. It was put together very well. I did have to read it a few times, each time it made more sense. Excellent work on this. Congrats about your wife. How far along is she?
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