I stand as his fist
connects with my face
as my skin splits apart
tears fall in disgrace
I look in his eyes
and see so much hate
what could I have done
no use to debate
A blow to my stomach
I fall to my knees
and cover my head
I can't seem to please
When I curl in a ball
and feel like I'll faint
I pray that this time
he will find some restraint
He kicks at my back
I scream in my head
almost hoping this time
he will leave me for dead
When he walks away
I crawl slowly in pain
and go to my closet
where I shut down my brain
I rock back and forth
for hours it seems
and fight darkness and demons
not always in dreams
At the end of the day
when it is all said and done
it's just a matter of time
maybe next time I'll run
Author notes
This situation I finally escaped from in 2005
Written March 24th, 2006
5. Most painful memories
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'When he walks away
I crawl slowly in pain
and go to my closet
where I shut down my brain'
I really like the rhyme here.
a great write.
thanks for entering,
good luck.
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Such a terrible story and I'm sorry you had to experience this. It's very well written though, and the words you use create the images as if I were actually there experiencing it too. Alliteration in alot of places, I love that!
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Wow this was really good
"At the end of the day
when it is all said and done
it's just a matter of time
maybe next time I'll run"
I'm happy you ran, guys like that should be in prison -_-
Great Write and
Thank you for entering
Good Luck
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i like this, it's very interesting. the structure is gr8 and the language is also very good. thank you for entering and good luck
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Thanks, it was a very bad time in my life.
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Wow, this is full of emotion and pain. I'm glad you found James and got away from this pain. The idea of hiding in the closet just gave me chills.
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Thank you for the comment. I am so blessed to have my husband now. I was a mess when we met. He has shown me what real love is. I am glad you got away too. I bare scars, but James doesnt see them, he sees me. Thanks again. Jeannie
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I also lived with an abusive man for years. I got away with my life and many painful memories......But I got away......Painful read I am glad you have found happiness. Robinrae.
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This is powerful. Nobody should have to go through that sort of pain, but I'm glad that you found someone to help you through before it ended you. Its hard to write about this subject... it kills me, but you did an amazing job. It has good imagery, though it hurts, and is just all in all a very great piece of writing. Stay strong
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This is very well written and expressed with some amazing power. The writing is simple yet very deep with some real power behind it. You explained the situation and conveyed your feelings brilliantly. I’m sorry you went through this and am glad that you are no longer in such a situation. I admire your ability to write about it so clearly.
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Can feel the pain in these lines, your sentiments are so well expressed. Vivid visual images created through the words you use. Such a sad piece - too real.
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painful
why that is my question people are so cruel is it just control or pure evil maybe both do we ever really know someone I mean I am sure at first you would not have believed he would do this sorry you had to live this -
Incredible
I am blown away. For you to have endured this, and then write about it says that you are an incredibly strong woman. This was scary and painful to read. Thank you for your author comment so we know you escaped this, well of course you did, you have James. -
moving and powerful
deep powerful and an extremely brilliant write. sorry for the pain you have felt. good write. You are a very good writer. -
Im returning the favor and Im soooo glad I did. this was fabulous. unfortunately for a lot of people its a regular and very real part of their lives. I hope this isnt happening to you.
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Powerful,Moving
I know this is very real reflection of the pain you have suffered, this is both a very powerful and distubing read. I am so sorry for the darkness you have endured in your life, and so sorry you ever had to know what it felt like to be on the recieveing end of voilence. I thank God that I found you and that you are now my beautiful wife. I will protect you for as long as I live. -
Wow tis is a powerful peaice of poetry. its so full of emotions and life i hope that you will be able to run and stand on your own two feet again
liz -
This is a very intense piece. I can relate well with your words. I've been there. You express yourself incredibly well with just a few lines. Fabulous job!
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Wow...this is seriously so powerful, crazily filled with emotion...i love the flow of this piece...I hope this didn't happen to you, but if its based on a life experience, I truly hope you have found peace and have moved on from your abuser...great write
always,
Fallen -
powerful
Oh wow.. This is a very powerful and intense peice that gave me cold chills. I can relate to this peice because my father used to abuse me and my mother did when she was drunk. That and I had a boyfriend that would hit on me and I know what it is like to sit and rock thinking but in a way not. I really love this poem and I want to read more. I also want to say good job getting out of the last relationship that was the smartest thing to do because some people cant because they are way to afriad. Congradulations on also findong some one to help you ment the emotional scars of the past. I'm very happy for you. Great peice and keep up the good work.
God Bless,
Frosty
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