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The Graveyard

Tread quickly through tousled brush for
Rarely does the graveyard slumber,
Forever dark and seeking more.

Careless weeds found in great number
Decay further year after year,
Rarely does the graveyard slumber.

Rotting bloom not scarcely found here--
Gifts of long ago age slowly,
Decay further year after year.

Unkempt graves are hardly holy
As faded words reach out for home;
Gifts of long ago age slowly.        

Forgotten dreams and lost souls roam--
These eternal spirits wander
As faded words reach out for home.

When none remain still to ponder,
Tread quickly through tousled brush for
These eternal spirits wander,
Forever dark and seeking more.

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Terzanelle.

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Written March 24th, 2006

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  • Starbucks missiles
    April 14, 2006
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    i like how natural the flow is. the graveyard is a place i know too well since i have visited them so often (i have a lot of older relativies) i have always thought about thoes people with gravestones faded. i always try to visit them and pay homeage to them even though i don't know excatly who they are. my friend and i last year visited the graves and celaned some and gave flowers to other and repected even ones without names...anyway without sidetracking more good write i like the piece and flow of it all! good luck in my contest! Usagi


  • catherinevania
    March 26, 2006
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    amazing

    wow. awesome poem. i love this. reading it gave me goosebumps... Great rhyming -- it didn`t sound forced at all, and it has a great flow. the repetition of "Forever dark and seeking more." is brilliant. absolutely. effective, moving, chilling, and left a big impact. that line is what gave me the chills. awesome job on this.

    -unleash the bats


  • chantel medeiros
    March 26, 2006
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    excellent

    i really liked this piece. it has an excellent flow. i loved these lines:
    'Unkempt graves are hardly holy
    As faded words reach out for home;
    Gifts of long ago age slowly.'

    amazing job
    --chantel
    blessed be


  • mzladyt
    March 26, 2006
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    Kind of spooky. Great job on this.

  • lid
    March 24, 2006
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    killer. interesting rhyming- good rythym- but most of all i found the repitition to be very effective. really solid in design.


  • shadowed lips
    March 24, 2006
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    wow i love it its gr8

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