Sitting here, thinking
Time and time again
Longing to be with you
To not feel this pain
Sitting here, thinking
Time goes flying past
Wanting to be with you forever
Time won’t pass as fast
Sitting here, thinking
What will the future bring?
Maybe we can settle down
I could propose to you with this ring
Sitting here, thinking
Wanting children who are healthy and well
To have a family with you and a life
Only time will tell
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Written March 18th, 2006
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A contest entry
- Username Contest by Alexandra Saint.
300 points, ended May 31, 2006, 16 entries
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I think this is a hopeful sort of piece.
The rhyme is very very good, and I like how you stayed with the same abcb-type system but didn't use the same rhyme too many times. I think the structure is a little hazy, but it's not bad or anything. It's a good write.
Kudos, and good luck!
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Yeah I like that line too. Thanks for commenting!
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wow...i really like the last stanzas...they have alot of meaning,espcially the part about purposing with the ring, but my favorite part the last line: Only Time Will Tell...thanks! Kepp up the GREAT work-Natalie
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Beautiful!!!! Great write!!!!
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The way this piece is written makes me look at love from a different point of view as in you never know what might happen next...very clever write!
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I like the structure of this a lot. A couple of the lines don't scan as well as they could - but it's a very nice idea. I like repetition like this - it's nice to see something with a proper format and structure for a change. Nice job. Bench
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