My brutal ambition now wears an apron
where drips the scream for stardom;
Broadway vocals in costume,
now a dotted frock of yawns
funky chicken to a less crisp Virginia reel.
Body svelte - deformed shadow
from a starved syllabus;
the audiences clap but
are usually underage, short,
and wear a smirky smile
above a prego bib.
It's like Kansas in August
a one-shade rainbow,
castor oil garland
with Santa coiled in dust.
Romance , a prim suggestion
of words with aspirin
wildless weekends that cruise the tube
the high life dreamed years ago,
now a comfort at Walmart's produce
instead of brew in the Alps.
But inside Pandora’s box lay
an envelope which thanks the academy
that Lucci finally won-
leaving me my stunning prayers
with uncloned Answers given,
not by Oscar, but the One and only
no stage is built to hold.
Author notes
Better a duck in the pond
than a monster at sea.
Update :
All suggestions were honored in light of this different kind of write and since has been changed in form to make the difference
Written March 22nd, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Contest For ONLY staff in AP and Sister Sites by Hekate.
300 points, ended August 21, 2006, 2 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Whatever Happened To Poetry? by Rof Cau.
350 points, ended June 18, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Some lines here have completely cut my legs off from under me.THe image of kansas and Santa in the dust...geez, now I know why I always raced through there. Ha=-ha.
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I have to make another comment on this one.
The first impression this gave me was a day in the life of a stay-at-home mom, to All My Children on the tube. As a parent, my wife could relate very much to this, and now that I'm the one at home, so I can finish my degree, I can relate. -
I am speechless.
This beautiful poem stands out on its own out of all the poems that were entered in the contest where you submitted this, it's the GOLD, as far as I am concerned. I hope you get it with this magnificent piece.
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This is a brilliant piece! Wow! I also had to read it a few times, not that I didn't get it, but I wanted to make sure that I didn't miss a thing! This was most interesting and well crafted! Great imagery and well chosen words! Thanks for sharing your talent!
Blessings and best wishes,
Frogz~
You have been Hoodwinked!
Have a great day!
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awhhhhhhhhh..and did I thank you? It popped up on me.
I hope, since hoodwinking is now a solo and copyrighted experience by the group.
It came from the drought of
one's little n' big self.
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Good Imagery
It took me a few reads to get the feel of the write. Words you use to create your pictures were very creative. my first responed stun, the secound it needs to be reread slow and to savor each word. Then I got it brilleant. I like it from start to finsh. Great job
You have just been hoodwinked by a poetic banditk
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well, I have NO CLUE what any of this meant, but I do know I LIKED it.
very fascinating, sent my mind spinning and since I've had 2 cups of coffee this morning, that was good.
thanks for entering
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I came across this by clicking the wrong link, so scratch that comment but I am happy to have had the chance to read
lol@me
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Good Luck!
Romance , a prim suggestion
of words with aspirin
Wildless weekends that cruise the tube
omg I had to reread that a couple of times it hit me
This was good lol..
I will comment more after the contest
Kari -
I've just come back from a while away - good to see you are still on top form! This is a nice development in your style- I like the enigmatic approach.
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Excellent word choice and pictures that actually glue themselves quite nicely together as the total picture becomes visible. It is kind of like one long sentence to me, and I'm talking about grammar, just the thought as it comes to completion. Thanks for sharing.
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aiy yai yai... that's HAWT. lol. i loved it. so much. it's very good. i love the way you use your words. brilliant. : )
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...............Thank you dear Myra. It's really something, but I realized that you, with culture and distance separating us, ..that you'd get it. Ssssoooooooooo glad you did. Thank you for seeing over, around and through. Bless you!
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BRILLIANT work
My dearest Friend
You must be one of the most mature Poets I know -- and that NOT in age
A refind piece of work you have posted here, so well worded, with fresh parables and descriptions of a life of dreams, with its interesting little twists of paradoxes and of wonders in the small moments of glory.
There are so many gems in here, I will have to return tonight, for I am moving into expensive time here in South Africa.
How wondrous a life must be through your eyes and how you grace the pages of this website.
Myra -
"G'night gracie" thanks cookie
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at your comment. It completes the thrill of my little beatnik piece that I liked writing so well..lol.--- at the risk of many not 'getting it'!!! Thank you. I know you must have already gotten the Oscar.
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love it
i think on the stage i would have to act like gracie allen i would not have to thank oscar because he knows i deserve the life time achievement award just for sitting and saying good night. keep up the good work -
Quite the background you have used here - interesting poem as well.
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There are some nice abstract images in this.
There are some nice solid images, which are real, e.g., But inside Pandora’s box lay
an envelope which thanks the academy
that Lucci finally won-
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If you allow your narrative to breathe a little more air, it will be better.
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Thank you ever for being honest. It's a 'beat' style that seldom can be changed. although it's transforming. I need a few more verbal hooks.
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Yes! Tou got it. One of these really 'beat' kind of verses that seldom come to me and can't be changed..lol. Glad it was coherent! Thank you for reading and sharing.
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great poem... loved it.
my favortie would have to have been this part:
"Body svelte - deformed shadow
from a starved syllabus
the audiences clap but
are usually underage, short
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I did not get this piece, although there are somee vivid images and thought provoking text, I did not find the tie that binds it altogether. Sorry, but maybe it's to early in the day for me, lol. Great effort though!
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Is this a poem about settling down as you grow older? That is what I got from it. Quite cute and funny. I am at that age where work has consumed my energy and dreams are on the back burner. This was very creative and interesting. Thanks for sharing.
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I have to say i had some problems too. I got the Susan Lucci thing and some parts on acting but...
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Oh..honey HIiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii!! I've been thinking..realllllllly thinking about you. How are you?
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the grand Academy awards again oboy what an adventure we do live.... hahaha and my favorite was
dd life dreamed years ago
now a comfort at Walmart's produce
instead of brew in the Alps. the dissapointment of growing up or growing old in the did I ever take that promised cruise I gave myself?
this gave me something to ponder and smile
so much left to do in so little time to do it in
thanks
Tamara
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It figures... I stopped watching TV in 1996..even All MY Children, my favorite soap for about 20 years or more... and she finally WINS!!!
Dee
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Believe it or not, she finally won in '97, I believe. I'll check on it.
But glad you 'got it'. I must admit that it came so lively and fresh to me and yet if one doesn't write it that way, it gets all wet and smooshy. If it's a matter of coherency, I do something about it.
wipes brow. Shoosh. Thought I was going mad there for a moment.
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Susan Lucci finally won???!!! Or is that envelope still lying in Pandor's box awaiting the big day... if it ever comes <img
I love the abstract artsyness of this stunning piece For me, this piece speaks of a life of dreams still to be fulfilled, not quite giving up hope, yet not really dissatified with what life has given. I think there's a little bit of wistful 'what ifs' in all of us, yet we find ourselves still being happy with what we have instead.
I'm sending you an IM, too
This is good, Dianne ... I love it !!! I wish I could write like this, whenever I try to it comes out sort of mangled instead of sort of abstract...
love and 's
Dee
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Must be the old fart in me too, cause I too know not where this goes - certainly much said in these lines, just nothing that makes me understand what the idea behind it is. Sorry -
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Pieces like these always leave me wondering lol....I enjoyed the flow, the thoughts it provoked, images skittering about at certain words, yes especially funky chicken lol...I never quite get this style of writing, must be the blonde in me I suppose wonderful job tho, thanx for sharing
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mm this is an unusual piece that must have completely gone over my head I like your style of writing but just did not get this one but that may just be the old fart in me
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Hmm...where did the inspiration come for this one? I actually like it. It's like modern art. Cool job!
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Interesting piece . . . I realli did enjoy it . . . it made me giggle when you said "funky chicken" . . . but god only knows why! Keep penning . . . keep sharing . . . and much luck to you!
Maggie -
Thank you..lol.
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I thought this to be very cute,well thought that brought a smile also to me.
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