A celestial meteor plummets deep.
a rhapsody of eternal lights defeat.
Stellar fall from the heavens bliss,
dieing embers dive into black abyss.
Feathered appendage braking waves,
a heavenly soul has fallen from grace.
Never again to know adoration's might,
spins and sputters in the dark of night.
From azure seas of heights in wonder,
drifting deep it dies pulled asunder.
Into artesian cold of an aqueous grave,
forgotten from it's glistening serenade.
What folly of sin did it perpetuate,
condemned sea death it can't navigate.
~~~Suseann~~~
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Written March 22nd, 2006
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A kind of dark write I think, because of the dying, but still spiritual, I liked it.
Keep up the good work.
best wishes as always
xElectricEyezx
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falling from grace
Portentuous prose, as sin and its reward sometimes a grim
fate; image of white wings into a deep dark ocean , chilling
and poetic . Should one be reminded of all dark deeds, this
prophetic write would be a good reminder of its rewards.
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all is good )))
Life is indeed much shorter
If you see yourself in that falling star
But if your life is like a meteor
Then simply fall in to places that are
full of love and oceans of mercy
waiting for you there is where I'll be )))) really good pax m -
Thanks Sherry,however it was meant more metaphorically about a fall from grace by a desending angel of heaven,as a meteor.But hey,still in all.I'm happy you enjoyed.~~Suseann
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This is a very beautiful piece. Thanks for entering. You have quite a way with words. Amazingly done,
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VERY BEAUTIFUL!
This is so beautiful! Your words and the picture make this a truly beautiful poem to read and just sit back and admire.
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Wow Suseann wow,
Reading this was being pulled under in deep depression and drowing in the water or sadness of it all. You are so good at rhyme and making it all flow so well. The background and picture are very lovely by the way I know you had fatasty on this. Still it could be life and so often those try and do win by suicides attempt. You pulled out the heartbreak in reality to how sometimes this sadly does happen. Love and hugs, Me
Edited on Mar 22, 2:17 p.m. because ''.
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