morning light in
days gone death
scooped
declining petals
in palms
of passers by
pressed flat
in family bibles
alongside james
and john
or maybe moses
lingered scent of yesterday
hope passed in exodus
pretending to be over
eye to memory in
silent supplication
crushed velvet symphony
sniffed by stuffy noses
tuned in manicured allure
of department store
cosmetic clerks
distillation of essential oil
through trial of crushing blow
and dying
superficial beauty
done now
in tones of
pretty is
as pretty does
the rose beyond skin deep
becomes perfume.
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Written March 21st, 2006
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Interesting penned words..the rose...becomes perfume. It is also a great symbol of everasting love...when it continues to bloom rather than fade leavign thorns.
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a great poem. i love roses and lilies and violet.
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hey that is really good. Keep the work up -
Thanks for your comment on my poem. I enjoyed reading this work. nice. Good luck on this contest!
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Excellent write.
Spiritul thoughts about life from begining to end expressed with artistry.
the rose beyond skin deep
becomes perfume.... liked the insight.
Best wishes,
manoj -
Lol, I am really glad that it is provoking multiple reactions. I really wanted to allow this one to interact with the reader in a way that does not require them to --stick to my intentions-- so to speak. And you are right. The first part does deal with dying, memory, and seemingly forgotteness. Death is a huge part of living, as in order to grow we sometimes have to go through some painful transmutation processes that sometimes leave us feeling less than attractive
. But the end result is strength, conviction and a concentration of the initial beauty that goes far beneath the skin of a person. A rose can't be perfume until it is crushed.
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I am not sure how to comment on this one, the first half seems like it is talking about the after life and how ones beauty does not die but lives on through the memories of others and then it goes onto maybe a deeper meaning where from a thing of beauty comes even greater beauty but potentially not in the same format it was in, the beauty of the rose as a thing to the beauty of the rose as aroma gained through distilling it into perfume or essential oils, mmm is this complex or is it me??, well done, Broad
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beautifel sense filled and evoking free verse
lol abigailxx -
Haha. I am glad you like it. This is actually the poem I wrote for one of the class assignments that I havent turned in yet because I haven't done the second part of the assignment yet . Glad you stopped by. Coming from the most original poet I know, your vote of originality means a lot.
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This is an original means of expressing an original idea in my opinion, Wynette. I like this because it is clear yet suggesting the meaning rather than stating it. The imagery is vivid and nice. I also enjoyed very much the assonance sniffed by stuffy noses.
~Diana
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