This is it, I'm ready to die,
I'm reveling all my secrets to this one jackass of a guy,
You've beat, you've crushed me, I'm tired of all these lies,
I'm abandoning this messed up life, I'm done with all the cries,
I'm leaving don't try to stop me, and don't even start with all those whys,
I hate, you hate me so lets go our separate ways and get this over with without any byes,
I'm slipping into infinity and I don't why,
But to hell with this life and let me die.
Author notes
my words were revel, abondon, and \
Written March 21st, 2006
A contest entry
- Triple Threat {contest} by OutsideTheMirror.
350 points, ended March 30, 2006, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Dang it.....guess i should have payed more attention to the spelling..
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I like the rhyming, although personally I would have broken the pattern at the end for effect.
You misused "revel" :[
rev·el ( P ) (rvl)
intr.v. rev·eled, also rev·elled rev·el·ing, rev·el·ling rev·els, rev·els
To take great pleasure or delight: She reveled in her unaccustomed leisure.
To engage in uproarious festivities; make merry.
n.
A boisterous festivity or celebration; merrymaking. Often used in the plural.
Good job, and thank you for entering!
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A very intense write, I agree with the sentiment, if two people are not happy, then go seperate ways, I think death is extreme of course, also I think you meant to write revealing instead of reveling, has a whole different meaning that way
good luck in the contest, Also, the title has one too many 't' s in it
Edited on Mar 21, 9:04 p.m. because 'needed to add to it'.
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