Sitting in this silent tomb,
more then just a quiet room.
'My biggest disappointment is you'
to them this statement is very true.
You wonder why she hates her life,
You wonder why she loves that knife.
She wants to run away and be with him
You'd rather have her tear out a limb.
She's gone and you can't say goodbye,
she wishes you had let her die.
All her life you said she was a mistake,
now you want to act like it was all fake?
Shes gone and all you can do is cry,
you now wish you could have said bye.
This was your little girl,
But you never treated her like she deserved, like a real pearl.
You're all alone, in her empty room,
now all it is, is a silent tomb...
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Written March 21st, 2006
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Some of it's a bit cliche, but for the most part, it's really original and good. I enjoyed it a lot. -
wow very dark i hope all is well for you and you dont do the things you say here love hurts and a deep hurt all you need is time
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Wow! This poem is great i hope you dont mind me saying you are a fantastic writer for your age! I know that people can take age for granted - like they think you cant have had a hard life just because of your age and i'm just one person thats prove of that being crap! I dont know what is going on in your life at the moment but i do hope that it all works out for you, you seem to have alot of hurt inside you! The person or people causing this hurt in you dont deserve to have you in thier life you sound like a lovely person x good luckx
love Gemma x
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I really liked this. It was meaningful and I due believe I know what your talking about. *winks* You really are more then what other people think. I know this, as do you. Good luck with what is going on. Hope it works out the way you wanted. Just keep you head up and your heart ready for whatever happens. Your a beautiful girl and people should be treating you better then thay do. Pure of heart and pure of mind. This way life knows in the end to be kind.
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Wow, I loved this. You have a real gift with words. I just noticed 1 thing. There was misspelled word 'your'it should be 'youre' other than that it was perfect i can't wait til you update again
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Wow, great piece. I can completely relate with your writing. You have a great talent with words. Your flow is excellent and you word choices are superb. Great job and keep writing so I can keep reading. -
"All her life you said she was a mistake,
now you want to act like it was all fake?"
Very touching and meaningful. i like it. good work
X Tragedy X
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