The bells of war are tolling for us
Who would have thought it would cause such a fuss
Belief, religion and political state
We should have known when they didn't relate
The world stands divided on what to believe
Surely we're right, the rest just deceive
They're corrupting our children, our husbands and wives
We have no option, but to dispise
Into the breach, let us stand for our faith
Rise up to evil and expose its mistake
We rise for freedom and for that we will try
But with all the facts hidden, we are sold by a lie
As now we rest in our garden of stone
Standing for those who cannot come home
How saddened we feel for the dreams we have lost
We weep now gently for belief and its cost
Author notes
Written March 21st, 2006
A contest entry
- Battle Front by ArmyRangerAngel.
300 points, ended May 4, 2007, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PRO-PEACE ANTI-WAR CONTEST by Revwilliamfoos.
1500 points, ended May 17, 2007, 38 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Terrorism by flyingphoenix.
750 points, ended July 17, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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A good write, looking at differing sides to terrorism, and its consequences.
It is somethign that effects everyone, which you highlighted well.
A good write, thanks for entering.
Webber
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very good
thanks for entering
love the papa -
Amazing piece thank you for entering
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I really liked this poem~ It's deep and very very well written! Where'd you get the idea for this poem? Thanks so much for entering my contest and good luck! My favorite lines were "The bells of war are tolling for us
Who would have thought it would cause such a fuss
Belief, religion and political state
We should have known when they didn't relate
The world stands divided on what to believe
Surely we're right, the rest just deceive
They're corrupting our children, our husbands and wives
We have no option, but to dispise" It has a nice flow to it. Thanks again and good luck!
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Thanks for the comments. The idea for this came from the general attitude of the global press at the moment.
There's a lot of fear and hate-mongering being thrown around attempting to cause great conflict between various social and religious groups.
Ultimately anyone, our friends, neighbours, even our families, could be labelled an enemy for holding a particular belief or opinion.
On the extreme level, this does cost lives, when a little understanding and patience could open the eyes of many and resolve these problems.
To me, personally, there are more dimensions in here, but this is the basic idea.
Thanks again.
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A wonderful write.
This is a fine write...you made it just in time for the cut-off of prewrites.....I was hoping my fellow Poets would dig into their hearts and use the "suggested" options given in the rules...But thus far, every single entry has been a prewrite....a bit disappointing, yet it does not take away from the brillance of this fine piece of poetry...Good luck to you in the contest!...Sincerely...Arkbear. -
Very well written and good rhyming. Thank you for entering my contest!
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Great piece, i see it's been entered into a couple of contests before so it's obvious that you consider this a good piece of work, and so do i, there reference to the devil as an 'it' and the 'garden of stone' was a good idea, good piece, and good luck in the contest!
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Fantasic work my friend it bought a tear to my eye thanks for entering
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This is excellent!!
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Though this is mildly confusing in bits, it has a very powerful meaning and you have penned this exceptionally well. The truth in your words make a very strong impact. Well done on this poem.
Thanks for entering the contest,
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Thanks for the input. I'm relatively new to poetry and have requested constructive comments. As much as I appreciate the comments I do receive, you are one of the few to provide solid criticism, thank you very much, gives me something to work with.
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I really liked the subject matter this poem delt with, I think the best stanza was:
"Into the breach, let us stand for our faith
Rise up to evil and expose its mistake
We rise for freedom and for that we will try
But with all the facts hidden, we are sold by a lie"
I thought the rhyme was a little simplistic though, and could be improved upon. All considered, welld done. -
I enjoyed the poem and one thing is sure...there are no winners. I also liked this verse:
"As now we rest in our garden of stone
Standing for those who cannot come home
How saddened we feel for the dreams we have lost
We weep now gently for belief and its cost"
Very nice poem.
Grizzled
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how so very true, war needs to stop, lives need to be saved,
in any way possible, families, friends suffer the loss way to often, thank you for sharing and good luck in our contest..Linda -
This is a very succinct and subtle poem on a subject that usually provokes such psuedo-political,anti-intlelligent drivel.
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Brilliant this is a very good poem I enjoyed reading this a lot great stuff. Good luck.
Happy Easter -
I thought it was very real... and it's a good way to put your perspective down on papaer... thanks for sharing
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good!
Thanks for the comment on my poem. The title was where i got my inspiration from. I liked this poem. The rhymes worked well(unlike most other poems) and it flows nicely.
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