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I WIll Rise Once More

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Your lips have spoken
So softly to my heart
Shielding the flames that
Try to consume it's beating
You lap at the wounds
Of the once turbulent storm
Healing them with your might
Erasing the scars of past

The hole that lies within me
Can only be filled by you
Snuff the flames that bind me
Set me free from the pain
Shed the talons his power
Held over my lost soul

And like the phoenix,
With your love...
I will rise once more




3.21.06

Author notes

Written for "Close Your Eyes, part 2"

The crude sketch I did by following this method can be viewed at i29.photobucke t.com/albums/c 253/stormgodde ss73/RiseSketc h.jpg
Written March 21st, 2006

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  • intanglio2ring
    May 25, 2007
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    A Rising Phoenix!

    Dear StormGoddess,
    A wonderful poem filled with a warmth that raises the reader with you on your journey! With all the trials we go through - it would be nice to know we could all rise again. Or find the one who would reach down and help!
    Beautifully written.
    Tang


    • StormGoddess Greeters member
      May 25, 2007
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      Thank you Tang. Appreciate your comments. They always lift my spirits and make me feel better on some of my yuckiest moments.


      Storm

  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    March 22, 2006
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    Thank you. I appreciate your kind words and thoughts.

    Autumn
  • Levity
    March 22, 2006
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    Oh, and these lines are great:

    Your lips have spoken
    So softly to my heart
    Shielding the flames that
    Try to consume it's beating
  • Levity
    March 22, 2006
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    Outstanding

    Very good work here Autumn, I really feel this is among your best. This has a brilliant flow, and the kind of imagery I like; original and intelligent but meaningful. I dont have to get out the erector set of excuses to make it mean something. A sweet, clear, and enjoyable read. Excellent poetry.

  • Melissa Powell
    March 22, 2006
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    oooh la la my friend very good!

  • rosepoet
    March 22, 2006
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    Wow amazing I just love, love poems. This is a indept feelings of love stright from the heart.You have painted a beautiful picture.Thanks for hte read.

  • Eyes Of Rain
    March 21, 2006
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    This is really an amazing job.
    Great work, and all the best in the contest.
    ~Sherry~

  • Fakaba Saa
    March 21, 2006
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    Great job, man! I looked at the picture you drew and I think I can see where you got some of that from. Just vague ideas, though. Amazing. I really like the idea behind it, as well.

    Keep writin', bro.

    --Connor
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