My feet traveling lightly
Over life’s stone pathway
Each stone being a different event
Each step I take I become older
One of beauty came into my life
Who changed my walk forever
I knew she was the one for me
Yet it seems society desired it differently
I took her hand into my own
Hoping to keep her always,
No matter how the path might change...
Yet doing so might be my downfall
Nothing could ever change my love
Quitting could never be an option
Because Age wrinkles the body,
But Quitting wrinkles the soul
To love is to risk everything
But not to try is to die in itself
For to live without my love
Is for me to die everyday for eternity
I might never find another like her
So I will take her hand into mine
And plunge into the unknowns of love
Taking that risk... I know it’s worth it
Author notes
This poem was inspired both by the several options in this contest as well as some personal things that I'm doing through right now. 
Please let me know what you think!
Written March 20th, 2006
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Now I know why I enjoy your poetry bro, it's because you amaze me every single time I read it, you have a beautiful use of words and phrases, all so unique to you...
The first stanza of each stone being an event in your life is a wonderful way of looking at life because that's just how it is, we never know where the next step will lead us until that stone is beneath our feet... so expressive and wise...
When love comes into your life, in some way you share those stones, and become one...we have to listen to our heart and not our head sometimes...in the 2nd stanza you have described your inner strength by choosing your paths direction...
I like this phrase:
Age wrinkles the body,
But Quitting wrinkles the soul ...you have not only invented a wonderful new quote but a meaningful one at that, with a possitive attitude...
The 5th stanza is the emotional one that touched me deeply, it just rippled through me and I like how you have made me see something in my life because of it
I'm so glad I had the pleasure of reading this poem, I cannot fault it in any way, in fact I would love to read how it all turns out
Love you loads
~sis
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I wrote this poem before I started writing which is why I'm rewriting it. But I do believe this is one of my better free verse poems on the site
That phrase "Age wrinkles the body..." is actually not my own (hence why its in italics). The contest that I originally had this entered into and it won gold in... it had like 3 options and I used all of them - one of the options was to use that phrase. But still glad you liked this poem and I appreciate your three applauds and the encouraging comment. 
--Tim
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Great job. This poem really captures how true love can really feel and all the risks you are willing to take just to be with this person. It was also beutifully written and seemed very thought filled. ~~Britt~
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GREAT POEM
I LIKE THIS POEM BECAUSE IT SENDS THE MESSAGE, THAT LOVE CAN AND WILL CONQUER ALL. I LIKE THE FLOW OF YOUR POEM, I ALSO LIKE IT BECAUSE I AGREE WITH YOU, TO LOVE IS TO TAKE RISK.....GREAT PIECE OF ART, I LOOK FORWARD TO READING MORE OF YOUR POETRY.
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Very good, I can COMPLETELY relate. It is very personal, I like personal poems. props to you and yours for writing. -
captivating and full of wisdom for all who read. Thanks for writing this because even at my age I need to remember what love is about. I remember in my youth that love was my only existance and salvation. I would have died or split my very soul in two for the love I had chosen. Beautifully written!!! Congrats on the Gold
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Hey Tim , this is amazing!
well written! Ill check more of your works later
Di
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Shes a lucky girl, and I mean that. I am so proud of you I cant even put it into words. God did use your friendship in amaising ways and I thank Him everyday for the times we shared. Again I am rooting you on!
GRace -
THis is my favorite poem that you have written.. except the one for me
Its amaisingly written and just shocking how far your writing has improved! Absolutely grand!
your dear friend
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Alright, now I have time galor! I want to firstly say this made tears come to my eyes, it was hard to think of anything to say rereading it again since it's just so.. soo.. jeez, amazing, supurb (sp), whatever, I can't even think of a word that would sum this up completly!
I loved the metaphor of life and it's stepping stones. That was so creative. I keep rereading it, so much to comment on! 
Well, the only way I can truly finish this without taking up all the box space is to say this might be one of the most heart felt poems I've read here, it rhymes, isn't forced, envolves love and society and just wow, it's got a little bit of everything. 
I hope that you and her last as long as you desire, you deserve the world. I hope she can provide it for you.
*God Bless*
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This was so beautiful Tim, I loved reading it. Made me feel all the better that you are feeling well. Can't leave a huge message, but excellent write!
What a lucky girl too.
*God Bless*
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niceness!
Very nice Tim. Its true. Its better to at least try than to not try at all. We can't go through life being afraid. We'd miss out on all the fun stuff that happens. And it doesn't happen to scardy cats. Trust me, lol I know!
I enoyed this poem. Its like a walk of life. And each step changes you. Even love.. actually ESPECIALLY love!!
NIIIICE!!
love,
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Wow... This is agreat write.. Serious... I like the "Age wrinkles the body, quitting wrinkles the soul.." I really love this poem.. .. Congrats, and good luck.
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wow, great job on this Tim, you are right, love is to "plunge into the unknown" it is hard sometimes to expressing feelings of love in words, so I applaud you for doing so well in that. Good luck with this girl! and oh, I Loved the background, it fits so well with the poem about being wrinkled!
well, good luck in the contest.
God Bless You.
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ohh Tim!! This is absolutly wonderful!! really great job on it! for you adn the girl lol good luck in the contest! and again really great job!
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ooooh many many many choices put to good use! i enjoyed this piece...the background ROCKS! hee hee it's WRINKLED! i got a kick out of that...this is so sweet, wow. don't let her go!!!!!!!!!! you've done a wonderful job with tihs right, i thoroughly enjoyed it, it kept my attention and it was interesting to see how you worked in the choices! very nice indeed, sharcu! thanks for the entry and best wishes to you in the contest!
anyonita -
Brilliantly courageous
This is amazingly similar to where I'm at, for such a transition. Another absolutely wonderful write, dear Tim.
This shows such strength of character and fortitude of romantic chivalry. Thanks for this. What a pleasure to read.
~*Milly *~
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this is very good. i also like the lines about age wrinkles the body quitting makes the soul wrinkle. maybe that is what is wrong with me. i quit. you did an awesome job on this. viyanna r langager
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Oh my, this is very deep.
Age wrinkles the body,
Quitting wrinkles the soul...
I love that, it is very well said. This whole poem is very well written! I just love the last two stanzas also. This poem is excellent. Best of luck to you in the contest!!
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