Expressions pour from the minds window,
fleeting ,leaping what emotions show.
Fears and sorrows cannot hide,
strong emotions felt inside.
Scrutiny of raised furrowed brow,
questioning intent slyness, shyness now.
Sudden shock widens lids to burst,
flash of the lash from surprise at first.
Mellowed in pleasured touch of the heart,
sweet kisses hasten slow lid drop into dark.
Maternal,Paternal pride they do show,
glisten in tears when in hurt swiftly flow.
The eyes are the celestial windows of the soul,
in a fast changing firestart they profess quite a show.
~~~Suseann~~~
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Written March 20th, 2006
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Wooo weeeeeee Suseann this was a fantastic take on this
picture, I also loved the lines Frogster quoted
Some great thoughts came to mind as I read this poem,
and I see you made a few changes
Thanks for sharing on this unique write of Art.
Blessings
Tears -
The eyes are the celestial windows of the soul
in a fast changing firestart, they profess quite a show...
I like those last two lines a lot... the wording is unique... A well crafted peice!
Thanks for sharing this with us and entering the contest... My best to you!
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You've never seen a lowered brow and the other raised in surprize? Honey,you haven't lived till you can cause that.Ha! Thanks for the heads up on the missing s.~~~Suseann
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"Expression pour from the minds window,"
I think you might need either 'expressions' or 'pours' in this line
Another thing that didn't really work for me was that I was uncertain whether a brow can be furrowed and raised at the same time..
Maybe you're using metaphorical language?
Congrats on a full poem.
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