I hear you whisper 'suck me'
while we stand in the crowd
You hold me down and fuck my throat
you say I should be proud
You pull my hair and lead me
into a darkened alley
Fuck me, rape me, slice me, kill me
and throw me in a valley
They wont find my naked corpse
no matter how time passed
You throw bloody clothes into a bin
and wonder how long I'll last
You come back to see how fast I rot
you say my stench won't be forgot
You poke the hole thats in my cheek
and whisper chilling threats
Undiscovered after a week
you sell my locket to pay your debts
My white cold skin gleams in the light
you smile full of pride
you sold your soul to the devil that night
now you'll always have to hide
Author notes
Written March 20th, 2006
A contest entry
- Give me Your Darkest by Night Terrors.
300 points, ended November 8, 2006, 25 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Hey distorted tint.. I'm sorry I didnt reply to this earlier.. I dont think I ever got the chance to read it. message me next time your online and well chat
luv Ali
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oh god that was sick I love it lol congrades you get a bookmark
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nice imagery
Very graphic. Nice, dark poem. All too often found in reality, though. If this is at all personal I am very very sorry. I liked this piece, it's very disturbing and that always interests me all the more. Which is of course why I created this contest. Very good work, I would like to see more. Good luck in the contest
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ali... grosss
i love it, where did this come from hun? whats been happenin wit u... keep writing -
outstanding!
errrrrrrrrrrrrm...
raw emotion. deep passion. you've captivated the pure essence of rape... and i should know. unfortunatly i too have been raped, yet i could not express my tortured soul in expressive language that you have so successfully achieved.
i would love to have and keep a relationship with yourself as i feel we are connected in some subliminal way...
please reply...
all my love
andre david
xxooxx
ps. you've made my day thank you
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I'm not sure if this is true, I hope not.
But it was so sad, and very well written.
I really hope this didn't really happen.
It brought back memories from my past, I didn't like that.
But still good job on writing it, you had to have a lot of courage. -
wow, that took my breath away, it really did. I could see all that you described, it was a vivid and descriptive write. Filled with pain and hurt. A very poweful poem. I just hope that one day you can lay your pain to rest,
take care
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I was going to describe this poem as sick, but then I sat back and thought about it for a while and I realised that it's not as sick as it's seems. Strange, dark and sad are more likely words to use. I really like this, the way you've written it keeps the readers attention all the way through till the very last word, and that's talent, I hate reading poetry and getting bored half way through, but your words kept my attention. Very vivd, and I like the way you use your imagery, the picture in my head while reading this actually made me cringe and close my eyes as I could actually imagine this sick, evil and twisted man doing what you describe so vividly, it's like a scene from a horror movie. Where did you get the idea for this from? I hope it isn't past memories, or anything you've seen in the past (I mean realistically not in a horror movie)or anything like that. This is a very good write...keep up the good work, I'll be sure to read some more of yours. Blasphemous xXx.
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This was realistic, i thought. I am at a loss i have no idea what i should say. I hope you feel better. I'm sorry but i can't comment properly It has me a bit shaken. It hit home, reminded me of things that happened to me.
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wow this is such a morbid write, but very well written - nothing was held back
Kimberley
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omg, this is so vivid and kind of really scary, but it is such a sad and amazing poem.
i got goosebumps while reading it.
You have written it very well and it flows well also. i dont know what inspired it, but if it comes from your own experience, then i am sorry if you have felt that bad. i hope things get brighter for you.
great poem, and thanks for sharing
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it was unbelievably sad, i dont know the motive behind this poem, but i can just extend my sympathy and hope it is not true and doesnt happen again, good u have written it down, it gives up peace and courage to face the tough times ahead...
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