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Hemoglobin Error

 

You're sharpening the blades,
No - please - don't hang them above my bed,
Like a biological guillotine,
generation exile
I want something for nothing, but I swear I'll pay anything
How do you get rid of Nothing,
A void that stands in the way of All...
Self, and other such things that boil down toTruth?

 

Rip me just like a duvet... must be reverse Oedipus
I don't wanna be found behind kitchen wallpaper, and hollowed walls
my wrist is your scorecard, my bruises just your size
You didn't want to hurt me, I know you didn't
You only wanted me dragged down, and killed like you
Stories of a child, make the hungriest predators
A child's story... just the hunger for substance growing

                    ...Slice me
                    like the anticipation of nourishing meat,
bone, AND FLESH
 
                   The pressure of your looming stance
                    hanging off me like fat growing around the material,
                    merging me with this stained couch, like flesh as the very chains

 

 

...And stifling,
by laws, by convention and...age of the body,
but it's as old as the abuse it endures... and the soul is older

 

I have been your veal... no movement,
"there is no such thing as outside...
this is your home, this is existence -
SHOW Me HOW HAPPY YOU ARE"
The meal will be so much more savory...
my social tendons never allowed to grow,
my... my... composure is feeble,
Is This Even Mine Anymore?!
The fences...and their mirage... of green life growing,
just past what I can really make out through this genetic fog,
and children thriving...
I know nothing but the damp, bleak...
concrete walls... I'm too weak for my own candor -
Too weak for my savior
Too weak to do anything but fight. and struggle.
and shine resilience,
feign strength,
force the power
to defy martyrdom,
hate patience
for motivation
...To be held in the rain,
carried from slaughter,

 

the government is in my head,
Flooded with conspiracies of the common psychotic,
with an incestuous twist And you are the only sickness now
You are innately in my blood -
is that why it's greying, ashing, and flaking
All for what's inside... All for what's inside...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Written March 19th, 2006

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  • individuality gold member
    March 21, 2006
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    this is really very very good - the only thing i wasn't too keen on was the capitals like bone, AND FLESH - i think it would be much more powerful for your poem having them as normal type, that would make this excellent in my eyes. rich and descriptive imagery


  • Basts Siren
    March 21, 2006
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    thank you for the great compliments it's always good to grab a new fan every now and then


  • Basts Siren
    March 21, 2006
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    don't be sorry, i can tell you weren't really trying to read it anyway. i accidentally sent you a reply complimenting someone's piece that you happened to not like, so it's quite obvious you came to my page and read the first poem that showed up to make some juvenile remark about it. wait...did I ever say I didn't wipe my ass with it? No, so let's not put words in my mouth sweetheart.


  • March 20, 2006
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    ive seen better toilet paper

    this might have been a good poem if you haden't wiped your ass with it first...wait, you didn't wipe your ass with it? oh, i guess it just wasn't that good then. sorry.


  • Lionslove silver member
    March 20, 2006
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    TREMENDOUS!!!!

    wow! this is brilliant. i, like most of us, have many things to do and therefore have not had the chance to go through all you're work, but you've definitely won a new fan. i love the show of a bright and perceptive mind. this is just fantastic. so real and honest - filled with great simile and metaphor. and one of the best things is finding an author that has abilities to weave in ways that i never could. love it...just love it. impact. felt the struggle...all those things..and so creative.

    all the best, Lionslove.

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