I remember
watching as you fell
from your high pedestal.
I tried to show you reality,
but you were too high on lust
to take a dose of reality.
You lost everything
because you wouldn't listen
to a loving friend.
I remember
coming to put a smile on your face,
and a kiss on your lips.
You looked past me without recognition
but you didn't even know who I was.
You were supposed to love me
how could you forget.
I remember
when you all forgot.
I had control
your life is lost.
You wonder how this could happen,
but when I spoke to you wisdom
you chose not to hear.
Now I remember your mistakes.
I'm forced to relieve them
as they haunt my memory,
and no one understands.
I remember
as you lost everything you had
just because you couldn't face the facts.
No one knows who you are anymore.
Do you realize all that you have left is a lie?
How does that make you feel?
I wish I could say I still cared.
What is it going to be this time?
Are you going to play by the books,
or will you say anything
so as to not face the consequences?
You broke me with your mistake.
You let them tear me down,
so that you could be pitied.
I remember,
but can you honestly remember
what happened that night?
Can you remember what you did
because I remember, and you lied.
Everyone is starting to figure you out,
and you thought you had them fooled.
Look past yourself for a change,
and maybe it wouldn't have ended this way.
Author notes
My ex-best friend ended up cheating on her bf by having sex with a good friend of both of ours twice in one night. The first time I was with her, AND she told me about it. I told her to tell her bf. Well, she didn't. Next thing I knew she changed the story, and was telling everyone that he had raped her. People hated me for not standing by her because she lied to everyone. The 2nd stanza is about my ex-bf drinking, and not knowing who I was when I came to visit him. The whole thing is based on my dislike for drinking,and how most people can't remember anything after being drunk.
~Angi
Written March 18th, 2006
A contest entry
- tell me your story... by Jaymy.
350 points, ended March 21, 2006, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Ranting and Raving by ourgirlFriday.
600 points, ended June 11, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I would prefer critiques rather than advice please.
Comments
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One of the reasons I'm only a social drinker
It sounds like a replay of Rainer Fassbinder's "Marriage of Maria Braun." Being in college, there isn't a day that goes by that someone doesn't walk past me talking about situations like this. Man, what a bombshell to take! Good choice for the contest, and best of luck!
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Many congratulations on winning the Gold and after reading your powerful write can understand why.It is always amazing how the best liars even believe their own lies too.I can relate to this gem.All the best.Elizabeth.
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oh my goodness --so very sad and the demon drink--a subject that i'm quite familiar with, I lost someone dear to me in my family due to drink--he drank his life away, thought it would hide the pain of him being abused as a child. I think your poem was well penned and well thought out and it kept me interested the whole way through. Good job and congratulations on the win.
shaz xx
( maybe you would like to read my poem Patrick )
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interesting way of expressimg your anger in two very tough situations. i'm impressed by your honesty. good luck!!
~Jaymy
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