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The Outer Body

 

My eyes do roam outside the train,
Soaring above the sun's sinking Fame.
This travelling is soundless as sleep:
Outside the impatience of time
railways are crashing with the spoils of fresh meat.

Violence for some was an untidy Villanelle,
As landscapes unfold in the wallets of the felled.
Where is the sense of destroying what's gone before?
I ask, I storm; men made from Flint and jagged form
conspire with the shreds in their pockets.

Then the eyes get tired, frosted in their sockets,

With the voices I mourn,
singing songs to the tuned stolen wind-widths:
Aeolian and Aryan in a heaven half shorn.
Staring above the Auld rock with a wing span swift
From where I can count the folly

In a Billion stars deformed. 

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Written March 18th, 2006

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  • comet of 1989
    March 25, 2006
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    i didn't really understand this to be honest but i did like the language that you used. your style of writing is interesting, well done!
    X tragedy X


  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    March 20, 2006
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    Ok.. for this one I got the sense of.. the poet is talking from the perspective of .. an angel of death that made the train crash and everybody died. It was very nicely written and I liked the fact that I had to read it more than once to understand it and look at it more to get what it was about.