Water flower
Your long stems tiptoe
along the water’s edge,
Green-thumbed hands planted you
where the brown reeds
cannot fence you in,
And so moss clings
jealously as you pass,
rose pink hips, turn off
with a final swerve against
the mirrored floor of the placid pond,
A current holds you
in its arms,
cosseting you close,
in bejewelled tones,
till yet another moves you down
the distant stream,
through the graduated twilight,
toward glad but anxious lees.
Author notes
Written March 18th, 2006.
To post in this contest, I had to hit the edit button to add why I liked this poem best of all my golds. And when I did that, it completely messed up the poem's formatting. So I've been trying to edit it to look the way it did. And perhaps the AP site is giving some trouble because I can't seem to get it right again! So, if you see anything looking a tad queer, that is probably why!
This is one of my favourite gold winners for a number of reasons. I love water flowers because they are not the typical flowers people think of when the word "flower" is mentioned. But more importantly, the poem is a metaphor for my own life at the time in which it was written. I had not yet found the person I wanted to settle down with and I moved through a number of relationships hoping to find that one person. It was not a case of angsty heartbreak as most people paint it. It was simply a depiction of the journey we all go through in life to find our place.
In a list
A contest entry
- Inspire My Paintbrush To Bloom (Contest) by Porcelain Shark.
300 points, ended March 26, 2006, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Gold Mine by Cherokee.
600 points, ended March 15, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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beautiful colors,and imagery. Congratulations.
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Very well done! I'm honored that this got picked to be in the book that I'll be in as well. Awesome poem and congrats on your gold!
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This is one of my faves by you!
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very beautiful
i really love this poem. it is so beautiful and well written. i've seen the water lily. i wonder this is about the water lily.
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I really like this.
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Hi chica
thanx... long time no see online. I guess we move at different times 
Miss ya! Ur a ray of sunshine!
P.S. Keep me in ur prayers. I've been kinda glum sometimes lately. But i'm a softie to the heart. Ur in my prayers! Hope all is well with u!
Marissa. -
A great poem Marissa
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very good
Nice thoughts.Very sweet and touching.
Deep feelings.Good job! I can see butterflies serching for love.
I can feel the energy of your poem.Sweet love is in the air like a breath of wind that touches our hearts.I liked your poem. -
awe Marissa.....this is absolutely beautiful......the images of a flowers petals falling to waters edge.....swept away in waters currant......like tears of love falling admist....swept away in a river of tears.....just some of the beautiful thoughts in floatation here......I see you won a trophy......its worth gold......I said so...
gorgeous epitomes of delight.......congrates doll......cappie for you girlie......
too....
always..
Mally -
a lovely write, congrats! I look forward to seeing the painting -- I'm sure Scarlet phantom will have fun with this.
Thanks for your sweet message too. What is the "Eye of the Poet" book you mention? -
Congrats on the win. Very nice!!!!!!!!
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Thank you!
This was such a wonderful surprise! I haven't entered a contest on AP in ages!
And all the entries were so good! It makes winning feel good when I realise how beautiful the other entries all were as well!
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Congratulations...well deserved...~Lilac~
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vivid imagery. Great job!Good luck.
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This poem is definitely great, I really like it. Great form, it adds to the poem, words flowing like a stream through the flowers it's speaking of.
"Your long stems tiptoe
along the water’s edge"
Many thanks for the entry and good luck!
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Beautiful imageries.Awesome!Abhi
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excellent
This is a very vivid poem, and it gives one some very deep insight what I feel is ones loss. Your talent shows and I may have concieved it wrong, but this could have a double meaning!
write ON!......Ennovy
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