Here you now lay.
under the soil each day
Is this what you really wanted?
You're under this beautiful green blanket
no longer breathing, dead and alone
Never again to see the light
Never again to hear your lover's voice
You took this path and died quietly
Your final breath used to say you loved her
now you're gone, and she cries at night
Why didn't you listen to her pleas?
why not stop when you had the chance?
Its over now, you're dead and gone
but she still dwells in the past.
And regrets the day, she hadn't ask you to stay
the day you died,
and the day you made her cry.
This was a hidden love.
But you never neglected it.
This is a memory of the heart.
For a broken girl, who lost the boy she loved.
Author notes
I choose picture 5
This is about my two friends... I guess the tombstones reminded me of them...
Written March 18th, 2006
A contest entry
- New Members Contest - March 2006 by AP Greeters.
300 points, ended April 5, 2006, 77 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
1 - 13 of 13
-
Very heartfelt piece..sad indeed to lose a loved one..best of luck in the contest
AJ -
This is a sad, emotional piece. I'm sorry that this triggered such a memory, but I commend you for sharing it with us in such a good way.
Thank you for entering, and welcome to the site.
Best wishes in the contest,
Stacy ;f -
I always like it when members are able to use something from their lives to post in our contests. It gives it such a personal feel as it is being read. Nicely done.
~ John
-
Wow! This is a very emotional piece. I, too have to wonder if it's more thought or emotion that causes one to choose the military life. Thank you for entering our contest, and good luck!
-
This is a very sad and heartfelt poem. It is very emotive and a touching tribute to your friends.
-
You have written a poem that captures so much sadness and heartfelt thoughts... thank you for taking the time to enter this contest, I wish you the best of luck!
-
Nicely done, good job. Thanks for entering and welcome to AP!
-
Thank you very much
-
A very touching and beautiful tribute to your friends. You did a wonderful job here of writing what the picture inspired in you. thank you for entering the contest and following the rules. best of luck to you and welcome to AP
~Kristy -
How very well you bring about the remorse that those of us who are still alive would have had we taken our lives or misused it. Well written for the most part.
your<---- the spell form is not correct in many places. I think you meant you are contraction, which would be you're.
Just thought you'd want to know.
Welcome to the site!
-
i love this poem so much! i thought the girl had killed the boy when i read the first paragraph.... but i realized that wasn't true. heh. yeahhhh, thats the kind of thing i would do lol. ^_^
-
How sad this is, as it seems to parallel someone's life according to the author notes. YOu did a lovely job on this. Thank you for your entry and best wishes in the contest
vj
-
Wow! great poem chick I hope that the girl you talking about in this poem some day finds another boy to fill that empty space! Lovely poem
Adding your comment:
1 - 13 of 13
1 old applause
