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Far Away



Far Far Away
where the demons dwell
and
the Angels pray
down under the muddy earth
where your tears wont reach
stands a man
you'll never see
with people that will never be set free
take me
let me see
i want to be there with them
i want to stand next to that lonely man
watch you far up above as your tears fall
but can never reach me
let me stand there with that man
and try to save the people that are just like
me
i am the key to there cage
i need to help them
take me
down there
bring me up there
somewhere
far far away
somewhere that's not heaven or hell
but somewhere where the angels and demon both dwell

 

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Written March 18th, 2006

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  • kaibab silver member
    March 30, 2006
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    It sounds just like earth to me...and you are the key to helping everyone just searching for love in a place trying to sell us everything but love...and I loved the symbolism of the lines through the words...like a barrier between everything your wish and everything that is...I t did move me and I thank you for the write.


  • ennovy silver member
    March 30, 2006
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    magnificent piece of poetic art

    This is so very deep and dark, you have captured my attention with this style of composing. I enjoyed the poem, but my eyes kept crossing, with the lines. So read it again and it rocked!
    Your talent is golden.......ennovy

  • Existence
    March 30, 2006
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    Great poem. I really like the backgroud and the crossed out words. It really does add to the mood of the poem. Onto the poem itself, I thought it was wonderful. I love the feelings that it expressed and the words you used to express them. Well done.


  • Silent09
    March 29, 2006
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    thax u

    wow u really thought it wa that good that make me really happy that some1 liked the way i write
    thax u so much!!!
    ~Anastasia~

  • Silent09
    March 29, 2006
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    thax u that means a lot to me


  • myselfinthemaking
    March 19, 2006
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    Boredom leads to many good things, and this is one of them.I like it, and thwe whole line through everything makes it even more interesting. Good job.


  • silenced soul
    March 19, 2006
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    great fucking job

    this was really good stasier i think it was really awesome i love the first line but it all goes together so well ya know well any way love you lots~lissa~

  • mirror image
    March 18, 2006
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    Amazing

    I read your poem and just thought, wow! I hope one day i will be able to express myself the way that you have. You are so talented.

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