we were the ones who don't belong
we were the ones left to be strong
we were the ones who hid behind a mask
our souls were so bare
we were left with an empty task
we were the ones who were never wanted
and left to be haunted
Author notes
This poem was one of the poems that randomly pop in my head while I was walking in the hallways at school.
Written March 18th, 2006
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this poem though short captures all that those who are different feel, beautifully done...
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Wow a short poem but a very deep piece of writing....it has so much truth to it. Wow very good poem.
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Omg, great poem! Its very nice! its tot true!
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I like it, but it feels like it's just the beginning of something longer. Like you should have kept writing. You stopped too short and stunted its growth, I guess. Thanks for the comment on 'This Night'!
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Marvellous
Natasha was certainly right- very powerful and to the point. Thought-provoking for sure! Way to go, and keep writing. -
I really like this. I understand what you're saying. I love your ryhming technique. Sometimes dealing with problems by yourself does help you to be strong(er) so I can really relate to what you're saying.Nice poem.
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Thank you! I appriciate you giving me specific critques of what is good about my poem!
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Thank you so much! What have you been through? I have been throug a lot too.
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Very good!
For a short verse, this is a very powerful write. It shows the strength that one can have within to overcome some of life's greatest challenges. "Never wanted" and "being haunted" are
strong images for your reader, and leave a sad feeling, yet a
glimmer of hope remains as you speak of strength. Well-written~
Natasha
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I LOVE YOUR POEM. I CAN KINDA OF RELATE EVEN THOUGH I DON'T HAVE ALL THE THINGS YOU HAVE. I THINK YOUR AN AMAZING AND STRONG PERSON TO KEEP STRIVING AHEAD. YOU HAD TO OVER COME ALOT AND MOST PEOPLE WOULD NOT HAVE. KEEP WRIGHTING AND DON'T STOP.
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