*And tears fall like sun drops
Days seem like hours
And the clock keeps ticking two past ten
Even though its been years since then
I said my sorry and my final goodbye
But still I wonder why
Did you leave me
Why did you forgive me
For something I don't even know
Why would you say something
like your sorry
You left
and my heart wanders
And my notes are all gone
From sour memories
Made into a false neanderthal
I took away words
And pieced them back together
but the clock keeps ticking memories away
And I'm waiting for one more day
.....Just one more day.....
To make you take back
All those words you were meant to say
I Hate You
I Love You
Your Gone
And their is nothing I'd rather do.....
then take my life
and give it all to you
*
Author notes
Meh, i guessed i missed him today.
Written March 16th, 2006
A contest entry
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300 points, ended June 5, 2006, 5 entries
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awesome poem...although, the font is very small...but good luck in the contest
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B
woah...thats a really good one...All the colors!
Even though it made my eyes wander I little bit :-)
Damn good
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the last lines are brilliant, it sums up the entire peice perfectly!
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Wow theses are great lyrics. I love this, it's really good. Um how did your writing to be like that?
Fairy -
"And I'm waiting for one more day
.....Just one more day.....
To make you take back
All those words you were meant to say"
wow...i really like that a lot. this is my favorite part of the poem by far. your author's comments don't do you enough justice. ...heartbreak hurts, doesn't it. i really like your use of color in the words of the first line, it actually does get me thinking. this seems to be filled with so much passion, so much pain. but it seems like you have gotten over the hump of denial...it seems like you understand he's gone. that took me a long while. the line of yours that i quoted is absolutely beautiful, it sounds like a great line in a song or something. i mean, not to say the rest of the poem is bad, but it is mediocre compared to that one line. like, the rest of the poem is written in emotion, but this line is written in language. do you get what i'm saying? i don't really understand myself sometimes. i hope that love will come back to get you in the end, things always work out if you want them to. thanks for sharing this poem, i got it off the shameless box...well done. always, serena.
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The last stanza was very beautiful and I wish who ever he is could return the same feelings to you because I know how it feels to miss some you love and how much better it feels to have them. Best Wishes
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