You wake me with a gentle kiss
Your lips teasing my neck and ears
Awakening in me a white-hot fire
You know I want you more than life.
Burning my insides with your touch
Sliding your fingers in and out
You know exactly what I long for
Yet you still refuse my need.
Then your euphoria takes me over
My fragile body goes up in flames
As you bring me closer to the edge
I scream for you, I scream for God
And no one but my broken echo answers
You look at me, a fire in your eyes
And laugh at my anguish, though you know
That we both crave the exact same thing
Senseless torment, sweet catharsis.
How can you ignore my plea
When I ache for you, and you alone?
I wonder how you could not understand
That I would die without you inside of me.
You kneel before me, and I shake with pleasure
Preparing for my final dive
Poised above me, you stand tall
Ready to take what is left of me.
You drive it inside me to the hilt
Stripping me of my virginity
Your molten lava explodes within
And I cry aloud as you overpower me.
After my piercing screams have died
I lie here, crying tears of passion
You kiss my eyes, hold me close, and listen
To my erratic breathing, a smile on your face.
Knowing that you have given me
What I have wanted all of my life
And though, for the moment, you have quenched my thirst
You know that I will be back for more...
Author notes
*This was basically an attempt to write an erotic poem while still conveying the emotional love that is involved and without being trashy. Enjoy!
Written March 14th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Raven Qualifier - Erotica: Straight, Gay and Bisexual by Raven Contest.
450 points, ended August 1, 2007, 39 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Beautiful
Great, Nice, Sweet, Horny, Lovely. Great poem that covered all the emotions. Excellent.
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Great write, thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
♥
whisper
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It did have bits of erotica that got me going but then the sensual came in a bit as well and cooled it down. Just as a note writing something erotic without the passion is not trashy. sometimes there is just the feeling of pure raw erotic that is needed at the moment. Thank you for entering, good luck.
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I don't usually read erotic 'cause it's just plain nasty, but this was twistingly sweet. I kinda liked it. Too bad the dude had to take the chick's virginity, though. **shivers** I'm not ready to be "plunged" into. **shivers again**
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I don't often read a poem twice out of pure fascination. Generally, the second read is to make certain I saw the number of spelling errors I originally thought I saw...and to confirm that the poem does, in truth, suck.
But wow.
The technical aspects are great, and the content blows away most poems I've seen with a smooth transition from one line to the next, one stanza to the next. I'm left to draw a ragged breath, blink away the haze over my eyes, and remember that I'm supposed to be commenting on this poem--not reading it a third time.
Well done. I would wish you luck, but I imagine you won't need it.
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Wow, this is really good. It really puts the burn in you as you read. It really got my mind wandering. Well done!
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very well done like your work
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