There was something in me
wanting to control me
emerging at last through me.
Basic things that we've trying to manage
in this society we've made maybe with rage
All these doings have become an habit
that i organised like a rabbit
bringing what i called our kit.
The chemistry we were performing
that i named enjoying
never caught us together.
All of them harvest what they feared so much
but somehow i asked myself, "why you?"
Warning is not a sign of desperation
but only a way for prevention.
The karma that we each possess,has not made any request.
I have been up to guess
when each time you wanted t trap us at best.
Isn't why You've created me?
-to be better than others
who, in turn think that they are smarter!
Patience & tolerance are keys
that i am trying to possess
after You have given me the access.
From now on, i shall accept You please...
Author notes
Drinks + peer groups + society judging what can be of everyone's actuality is the explosive "mix"!
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P: i loved how you wrote this out becuase all though you have it about drinks it could be about many other types of 'bad things' like drugs that can control us.
no negative feedback or suggestions
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Isn't it amazing how drinking sessions can bring out the depth in you that you never knew you possessed!?
This was another fabulous piece. The judges were obviously fools because this was nothing short of a masterpiece, I for one found it very inspiring. Well done.
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Well, you definately managed to enter something that's quite thought-provoking into this contest - and I like that
best of luck
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well, thank you! I hope you will get what you want in the contest..
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i find it a little hard to understand besides that it rocks abd it reminds me of myself in one way to another great job and best of luck in my contest
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thx a lot for being encouraging..
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Tjhank you very much for sharing. I love reading about personal experiences as they tend to be more heart felt in poetry. Thanks for sharing and good luck.
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It's me in the story...
Actually it is a personal experience that I needed to express on paper.
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