P
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i
n
t
e
d
& cold
A meter of
fang and drip
Thousands of
years alone.
Slick in dark
caverns as
mysterious
and dangerous
as love.
I can't help but
hang around
and
c
o
l
o
n
i
z
e
Author notes
Written March 15th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Still Life Poetry by Hoosierpoet.
300 points, ended May 21, 2006, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Amazing. I love the form, it sort of underlines the title - without even having to read the poem (which I did of course). I'm trying to decide which line I like best but it's a hard thing to do - all of them would be the best answer probably!
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Great job in capturing the essence and spirit of the "still life" in words. Masterful work, typical of what you are so capable of doing. Good luck and best wishes.
Hoosierpoet
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I can't help but
hang around
and
c
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l
o
n
i
z
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Brilliant as always, Mr. H. This one definitely has the glow of your mark.
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Not only are you a germ, but your form looks like a double-headed mosquito... it's like three for the price of one! Woohoo!
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Well I had the same mindset as Chilly, especially with the word "colonize." makes me think the same thing. But also how some emotions can do that. Sometimes even without our knowledge.
Thanks for entering.
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Living in Missouri with all of its caves, I have seen many of these beautiful calcite deposits, but I would have never thought to associate them with an emotion. But thinking about it, it does make me think of a sort lonliness one would feel even in a room full of people. Very well done. As always, I enjoy your work immensely!!!
Anna -
ripples of soliferous solipsism
speaks of suspended solitutude
...so it seems
in the blackness of blank
we breed in the slough -
brilliant Horus, hang in there buddy.
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You sound like a germ... staphlococcus invading and colonizing every where... I'd just stand you up all in a row and make you cough.. lololol
neatly done Jeremi .... good luck hun
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