A game of drunken spin-the-bottle
and the secret is out: you
were my first kiss,
you don’t even remember.
Who would?
More than a decade ago
we were knee-high neighbors
playing in the monkey bars in the park.
One day,
the other kids decided I was the princess
imprisoned behind the bars.
You were inducted the knight;
You brandished a stick
and pretended it was your sword.
After a slow-mo slaying of the dragons
And black witches that our playmates acted
You got me out of the bars
And we ran away from them
Hand in hand.
I took your sword and
Asked you if you had a horse.
You said it would only appear
If I gave the knight a kiss.
So I kissed you
Tasting a mix of sour milk and spit
On your lips.
I wiped my mouth with my sleeve
And demanded for the horse.
You smiled at me
And kissed me this time.
Then you ran,
And I was glued on the spot,
Willing the horse that cost
Two kisses to appear.
Years later, leading up to this game,
I’ve only had two kisses
(those two kisses)
And no one dares rescue me
From the disappointment.
You ask me if I was joking.
I ask you to take back those kisses
So that I would be.
Author notes
Written March 15th, 2006
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galing nito...gusto ko yung story...I like the innocence of your emotions expressed in words so full of maturity...
this ,makes you remember good ol' times being a kiddo
this write made me smile...
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er,palanca...hmmm. right. hehehe. thanks for the comment.
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good
not a true story!always that disclaimer.enjoyed this again.waiting for your name to pop up in the palanca awards. keep up the writing.sweet and fun story with that twinge of heartbreak in the end. -
Hmmm, I'm glad this poem elicited such a reaction from you. No worries, it's not a true story.
THanks for reading the poem.
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I love this poem! You definitely had me hooked from the start.
If it makes you feel better, I just got my first kiss last year...and I'm 17...
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Dig this.
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The memory in the story is so sweet and innocent I almost cried to see it paired with such a bad one. I am sorry that the greatness had to melt away.
'You ask me if I was joking.
I ask you to take back those kisses
So that I would be.'
These lines almost made me cry. Something as special as a first kiss between children should never need to be looked upon as a mistake. -
the sweetness and innocence of this piece amazes me. certainly a trip back down memory lane, but sadness also permeates the ending, culminating in a very mature fashion that left me feeling sympathetic and wishing that the pain could be taken away. lovely write anyway, good flow. keep up the good work
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beautiful innocence. A lovely piece of writing x
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oh this is very sweet and well written and a very creative content and way of expressing it well done
love and light
blaze -
thanks so much.
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this was indeed sweet and had me thinking of my first kiss. i did not get a horse either
but i did believe in magic and if that i wished hard enough it would come true. i also believed people told the truth. so that was 38 years ago 
wanting the two kisses to be taken back so that the disappointment would disapear is brilliant
if only everything were that easy.
awesome write...i applaud the poet and the poem
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GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST!
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I love this. It makes me think of the elementary days, back when recess was the highlight of the day. Great job!!! I love it.
q-pid -
Thank you very much for the comment.
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Such a sweet & innocent piece... I adored this (bookmarked it, in fact ) These lines held my gaze, as well as the last stanza:
"Then you ran,
And I was glued on the spot,
Willing the horse that cost
Two kisses to appear."
Keep up the inspiring work my dear How I love your words...
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