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Pinpricked Holes (Triolet)

 





Pinpricked holes in the colorless sky,
through the darkened cloak of night
I make a wish, and plead to my
pinpricked holes in the colorless sky

Patiently I await for their reply
as darkness gives way to their light
Pinpricked holes in the colorless sky
through the darkened cloak of night

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Written March 15th, 2006

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  • LionessK gold member
    March 18, 2006
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    Beautiful words to go with a beautiful picture...the one above the words and the one your words put in my mind..
    I truly enjoyed reading this..it is lovely. Thank you very much for entering the contest. -kicks you anyway-

    ~Kristy


  • Blazor
    March 16, 2006
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    I really wish that this kept going. The symetry has such a strong power in this one that goes well with the calm tone.


  • Abreadcrumbandfish
    March 16, 2006
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    this is very interesting. Very well written, perfect actually. Good luck in the contest.


  • SusanL
    March 15, 2006
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    this is a very picturesque triolet. takes wishing on a star to a new level.I like the way you have tied the refrains i n so well. especially in the first stanza.
    Yep got a winner here.
    Susan