"It all began in earnest when I dropped"
a thought as I walked down the road.
They put uneven paving there
To hamper or to goad.
I hate today: it's all gone wrong:
I boiled the kettle dry,
The toast got burned; the eggs went hard
And soap got in my eye.
So out I came to get some air:
The stupid door got stuck,
The neighbour's cat pooped on my path
And that's just half my luck.
Computer's up the creek again
That's why I fled the house.
It jammed the letters left and right
And then I spooked the mouse.
Life always does these things to me
I've been around too long.
And if I tried to end it all,
I'd even get that wrong.
I try to make the best of things
Along life's weary way.
If people would just leave me be
I might get through each day.
I launched myself at pearly gates.
St. Peter stared with frown.
"No luck for you, poor soul", he said
"For Heaven just closed down."
Author notes
I've altered the first line (of course) and have made one or two changes to this prewrite. As I said after the original - humour isn't really my thing.
Haven't time to write a new poem because I'm about to embark on compression!
A contest entry
- just a fun contest! prewrites allowed by honey bear.
650 points, ended January 12, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - FOR ALLPOETRY POETS : #46 : Picture & 1st Line Prompt by Lyndon.
1900 points, ended February 26, 2008, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Heh heh...for all you deny having any flair with humour, you've produced a witty and endearingly relatable poem here, detailing your hapless run-ins with both Murphy's Law and the Bad Luck Fairy!
We've all been there at one time or another ~ or for some, it seems to be ALL the time
, and I find people always enjoy reading stuff that they can empathise with in any way.
Well done, and thanks for this funny entry.
Best of luck!
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Well, be careful dropping thoughts.
Your antics were enough!
This does bring a thought: why ARE some days full of frustrations sufficient for three months?
Thank you for this poem.
Ron.
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Hi, I see gold here, what a laugh, I have days like that everyday,lol. aml Di
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very good
ah we all have experienced on e of those days 8grin* but it sounds to me like this was one of the worse thank you for entering and good luck in the contest 
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This brilliant you have really wonderful flow and rhyme. I liked it so much I read it twice. Good Job and good luck
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Grams, this is brilliant! It's melodic in rhythm and the rhyme is good. I agree with TheThinker, humour suits you 
Love you millions and always. Laura 
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Funny
Well If humour aint your thing, yoou should do it more often. Great rhyme, funny diity kept me reading. Well done -
Hi Jan. Thanks for your comments and encouragment and, bless you, for saying I made you laugh. Didn't know I could do that very often for people. So you made my day. Thanks again. Joy
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Hallo R S Adams Jr and thank you for your comments. I did this just to see if I could because humour isn't really one of my things. Thanks for your encouragement and I'm glad you liked it.
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LOL LOL LOL
This is brilliant. It is funny. It is clever. It is.......um just GREAT. LOL
This was so good I just laughed my head off. Excuse me whilst I put it back on.
Excellent.
Jan -
hilarious.clever
Well done...good rhyme, faultless rhythm and a jaunty, humorous flow. I enjoyed this poem a lot and I wish you luck in the contest. -
damn that was awesome.... i dunno what it was about it but it seems like i can relate pretty well... good luck wit ur work
Andy
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