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As I walk along this lonely street
Looking out for love
Out of the blue you appear
An angel sent from above

I am standing but not breathing
I cannot believe my eyes
An angel sent from Heaven
Has descended from the sky

With her long blonde hair and deep blue eyes
She looks deep into my soul
Removing every sin and doubt
That keeps me from being whole

I see the madness and the sins
That I have committed in my life
She swallows them and kisses me
Giving me a new life

I wonder what she’s thinking of
And if she is disappointed
Then she tells me that I have been forgiven
My heart has been anointed

I feel so lucky to be here
But, I know that I must be careful of what I think
For every thought and emotion
Is known to her instincts

My God you are so beautiful
Unlike anything I have ever seen
With you I feel so safe here
My mind and heart are so very clean

I thank you for all of the love you give
And for everything that you have done
From now until the end of time
You will be the one

You are my knight in shining armor
My true savior when I fall
I know that I can trust in you
To be there for me when I call

Then I feel a breath of air
All around me in the night
I realize that I am in her arms
And the angel has taken flight

She asks me if I feel okay
And I tell her that I do
I’d give anything to stay here
And live the rest of my life through

I see the planets as they rotate
And everything that goes on
I feel overjoyed and excited
That my life will continue to go on

God has chosen me to live and reign
Forever by his side
For his angels have touched my heart
And stripped me of all of my pride

I smell a scent so beautiful
From the angel in my arms
I know that here I will never be afraid
Of anger, hurt, or harm

She whispers softly in my ear
“Awake my darling, for we are near
In the arms of God is where you will be soon
Where your heart will beat to a different tune”

So I open my eyes and see it near
The Gates of Heaven are finally here
In the front of the Gate are
Millions of angels awaiting my arrival
Congratulating and applauding me
For my earthly survival

They wait for me with open arms
And they ask me how I feel
I tell them that I am proud to be
A part of something so real

I see so many faces
Of people that I have never known
All anxious and happy
That I have finally reached my home

The place where I will always belong
In a family so sweet
Where nothing else could ever be
As wonderful to me

I thank you Lord for everything
And for giving me a place in your heart
Where I will be for eternity
Where my endless love will start


 

 

 

 

Author notes

This poem was a dream that I had one night. I was so moved by it that I had to get up and write it down. I hope that you enjoy i


Written March 15th, 2006

Option #1 So something redemptive, a story of one who is being redeemed, is in need of redemption, or has already been redeemed.

Option 2) Write about something God has done for you, something He's done in your life.

A contest entry

Friends, I appreciate your comments and review on this write. However, please do not add my name to your comments due to the contest rules. Thank you very much!

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Comments

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  • What a beautiful work you've written! The first part reminded me of our Confirmation retreat, right after confession and we were told that we were loved by the Lord, beyond every sin we'd ever committed, we were loved. And it was beautiful, and I felt it in this piece. And then returning the love of my own heart to the Lord is a thought ever present in my mind, and truly inspiring in your poem. I absolutely loved this piece, despite it's length. It was definitely worth the time to read. I think you meant "knight in shining armour" rather than "and" shining armour, but it didn't matter because your point came across so well and I loved every line. Thank you so much for entering -- this is just the sort of thing I was looking for!!

    <3 Erin


  • myorama
    May 8
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    This was amazing how beautiful thank you so much for sharing.

  • This is absolutely beautiful. I was totally captivated by this well written piece. So much imagery and comfort within these words penned. What a beautiful dream....and due to several recent deaths I found even more comfort in this piece. Thank you for entering this piece and allowing me the pleasure of reading this fine piece of work.

  • this is just what i needed to read today. i am not in the best of moods so am reading the entries in this contest to feel better. thank you for helping me. good luck in this contest. viyanna rosemarie


  • individuality gold member
    April 18

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    a good piece, though i was thinking ah this is going to be long with reading - the time just flapped away as i got involved in the poem, soft and smiling and full of emotion, a lot to take in in one read, it definitely needs a few reads to capture all that is here.


  • Angels Whispers gold member
    December 18, 2008

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    CONGRATS

    CONGRATS to you my beautiful caring and so loving AP brother. I knew you would take the gold.This poem certainly deserves such a trophy, as it was most beautiful to read and gave the reader such comfort and peace when reading your words.You write with the heart of an angel, and this shines through your penned words.
    Never put your quill away Bro, for you have much talent.
    Love you much,
    Your AP Angel Sis
    ~Anne~


  • Katie Lazette
    December 16, 2008
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    Congratulations Jeremy on winning the Gold for your beautiful poem. Merry Christmas.


  • November-Dani
    December 15, 2008

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    Beautiful! Just amazing stuff. Congrats on your trophies. Very very well done. Thank you so much for entering your amazing peice.

    Dani.


  • HeavensNewestAngel
    December 13, 2008

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    This is a great poem. The rhythm and rhyme flowed superbly. Well done and best of luck in the contest!


  • whits end silver member
    December 13, 2008

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    Supreme talent

    This poem is written so delicately with rhyme, flow and passion. That is some dream, it sounds wonderful, I bet you didn't want to wake up.

  • Angels Whispers gold member
    December 5, 2008
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    Awesome


    Dearest Brother,
    I sit here with tears falling down like rain, I am lost for words at the moment so please bare with me while I collect my thoughts....

    The Suggestion box states... If you were to revise this poem, what would you change? ...
    my answer to this is....NOTHING!
    Your title is a soft yet powerful one if that makes any sense.

    The picture posted with your poem was heartfelt with the beautiful wording of "Welcome Home" seeing this person being welcomed home started the tears, for I felt so much love just looking at this picture.

    Then I started to read your words, and the tears poured forth like a waterfall.
    I was so moved by your words, never ever has this happened to me with this strength of feeling.
    Yes I have shed a few tears while reading someone's work, but this time it was different.

    It felt like that your dream was a mesage to spread to all.
    I could not stop reading, and even though it was over the line limit, it did not matter for the message that you were relaying to the reader, seemed more important than a line limit!

    You penned this so well and took the reader on a most beautiful jouney to home.

    Your words painted in the mind of the reader, such beauty and the emotions you weaved within those words, were filled with pure,uncondidtional love.
    The story told was awesome and very beautiful, and so very soft.You had a glimps into the place,where we are all to travel too, in due time.

    This was a gift from our Lord, and within this dream there must of been a special message for you, was this dream at a time in your life where you felt lost and alone? I really believe there was such a message meant for you!

    In my eyes, this poem is Gold, and I truely hope that is what you recieve for this was writen with a pure heart.

    I wish you all the best in the contest, and send to you, much love and happiness.
    Your loving angel sister,
    Angel-anne


  • tawk gold member
    December 4, 2008

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    Beautiful in everyway, I was in tears as I read your very lovely and heartfelt write. Truly amazing, thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest my dear friend. hugs Theresa


  • Spiritual Nature
    December 4, 2008

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    This is way over my line limit for this contest, but I so hate to DQ anyone. Actually...I never have, so, I will make an exception for this amazing write. It is all so true, I just know in my heart. Thank you for sharing and allowing me a glimpse of my home and how it might be to finally arrive at my true destination. I cannot say your poem touched, it did so much more than that. I can't believe you have only won Bronzes for this work, for it is surely Gold in my eyes.

    Blessings,
    Doris


  • echo-ink
    August 29, 2008
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    What a beautiful

    dream to have, to finally reach our eternal home, really good job on this. BRAVO!


  • XxForeverFaithfulxX
    July 23, 2008

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    Amazing

    This was absolutely amazing! It brought a tear to my eyes and really made me think! This was a beautiful poem and I'm glad that I got to read it!^_^ Thanks for entering and good luck!!

    In Christ,
    ~Kayla~

  • midnightblue1272
    May 24, 2008
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    Beautiful!

    I wish I was in your presence right now so I could give you a standing ovation. Just superb!


  • movedon
    May 21, 2008
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    WOW..........just........wow

    thank you

    Mylee


  • Werewolf Avarus
    May 18, 2008

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    Thank you for the entry, it was a lovely write, and the flow was beautiful.

    Good luck!

    'Wolf


  • LoneFairrie
    January 3, 2008
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    Beautiful poetry. I loved it. It was very well written


  • ennovy silver member
    December 3, 2007

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    Totally beautiful this dream you have shared with us will one day come true...I hope for all of us in some form or fashion.....excellent write..lovely!...novcy


  • Cari Cullen
    December 3, 2007

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    Very good, God does have his ways to tell us! I really loved this poem as do ,y love with God, thanks! This poem reminded me of my Grandpa thats in Heaven right now. Thanks for giving me my memories of him again.


  • stavykm gold member
    October 28, 2007

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    Beautiful Write

    Thank you so much for sharing this heavenly poem with me. It is so perfect to me. So much peace and relief knowing my son loved the Lord and he is so happy in heaven with his angel and the Lord. I like it as he goes through life and space to the pearly gates where many are waiting with applaud for my sons arrival. Such a Excellent Write, Thank you for sharing your gift to write such beautiful poetry with me, I feel honored. Blessings to you, Love Kelle Marie, stavykm


  • mysticstorm gold member
    October 25, 2007

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    This is very beautiful and touching. A wonderful tribute to earth angels and the power that they have. What a wonderful dream of peace and c omfort.
    Thank you for entering!


  • X iMPERFECTiON x
    October 23, 2007
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    oh my goodness i love this poem!!! that dream was beautiful! great job and good luck!! =]


  • SilverButterfly gold member
    October 21, 2007

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    Jeremy this is beautiful! What an awesome dream you had and you turned it into an awesome poem!!

    GBY
    SilverButterfy


  • Talking Toni gold member
    October 21, 2007

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    Nice Rhymes.....

    This is heartfelt and beautiful. I'm sure "Stavykm "will enjoy reading it all. Thanks for your entry and the best of luck to you...Toni

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    May 24, 2007
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    Thank you for your lovely entry, Josephine


  • Sle3p
    April 5, 2007
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    wonderful work!


    -maddie


  • maa gold member
    April 3, 2007

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    this is such a beautiful and touching poem, and I am certain that it was not only a dream but a so-called astral journey ... all you have experienced was actually real ... maybe you had been in a situation of your life at that time where you were on a quest, and this was Heaven's reply to you ...
    I often have such "dreams" of being in the Lap of the Divine for consolation, they just manifest through different imagery, according to our belief-systems, but essentially, they are all One ...
    wonderful ...

    maa


  • debilynn gold member
    March 5, 2007
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    beautiful! thank you for entering


  • redmarkonthewall
    March 2, 2007

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    Quite the dream this must have been! Very nicely done, and it was a good read. My favourite part would probably be:
    "With her long blonde hair and deep blue eyes
    She looks deep into my soul"
    Just a thought that I say to everyone that applies, perhaps some puncuation may be worthwhile. It is up to you but I thought I may say something. Anyways good job! Thanks for entering! Good luck.


  • dream5111
    February 23, 2007

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    "As I walk along this lonely street
    Looking out for love
    Out of the blue you appear
    An angel sent from above" is my favorite part


  • sweethelper
    February 19, 2007

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    wooooow !! this is sooooooo coooooool !!!! i loved it to the core !!! i wish to read more of your writes !!

    best wishes in the contest ,

    your well wisher ,
    -truthwriter


  • JaydensNanas
    June 24, 2006
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    Awwwww, this is truly amazing Jeremy! It was a lonnnng one to read but well worth it! I LOVE it when I have sweet dreams like this although I havent had any about heaven! Beautiful! Great job!


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    June 23, 2006
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    Thank you so much for your comments and applause on this write. I appreciate it!


    Allen0826


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    June 23, 2006
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    This is such a beautiful poem. And if you pray to God enough he will help you find that special one as you describe in this poem. Keep up the awesome poetry!!! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • dustookie2
    April 25, 2006
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    nicely done

    well i thought mmm another love poem and yes it was nice but then wow you turned that around on me....my one point perhaps the length...may be you could tighten it up a little i just felt it lost the flow in a few places
    I feel so lucky to be here
    But, I know that I must be careful of what I think
    For every thought and emotion
    Is known to her instincts
    the second line very long as an example when i say lost the flow. just a thought . when you read it out aloud i feel you get a better idea of the flow ....still one mighty good poem...love the way it turns have gone back and read that part a few times.


  • Prolific Poetess
    April 25, 2006
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    The was so touching

    You had me hooked from the start

    What an amazing dream

    I hope that you will have many more to write about!

  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    April 25, 2006
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    lol You know, it was the most vivid and memorable dream that I have ever had. I guess that's a good sign huh? I am glad that you enjoyed it! Thanks a lot for you comments my friend. I hope that you are having a wonderful day!

    Jeremy

  • to some i am a poet
    April 25, 2006
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    what a wonderful dream to have. so much better than all the dreams i've ever had. you're lucky to be dreaming the way you dream.. very lucky. mine are always haunting or scary in some way.
    also.. you did a very good job writing it out into a poem. i could imagine what you were dreaming. very good job here.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    April 25, 2006
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    I thank you Lord for everything
    And for giving me a place in your heart
    Where I will be for eternity
    Where my endless love will start

    It is truely a great journey of the peaceful words here bringing the truth just in front of the muse of the readers as well...


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    April 25, 2006
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    Thank you for your comments Victoria! I appreciate it!


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    April 25, 2006
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    wonderfully done

    So I open my eyes and see it near
    The Gates of Heaven are finally here
    In the front of the Gate are
    Millions of angels awaiting my arrival
    Congratulating and applauding me
    For my earthly survival

    This is definately the way I feel it will be.
    OMG i loved this. Beautifully done as always my friend, you took my breathe away. Sending my spirit to another place. Praise God , Glory and happiness in the gates of Heave, well done my friend.
    With love,
    Victoria
    God Bless you my friend!


  • Blood and Roses
    April 25, 2006
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    great!!!!

    This is a great peom keep up the good work!!!


  • Errant Panther gold member
    March 15, 2006
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    Deeply spiritual work. Well done.

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