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Drifting (rictameter) & Yet (nonet)

Drifting (rictameter)

 

drifting

through time and space

past rivers of great minds

i reluctantly find great hope

in the old seeds of creativity

as they branch out into great trees

and bestow upon me

a great sense of

drifting

  

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Yet (nonet)

 

I speak not of things I do not know

and often of things that I do.

I confess I speak riddles

and often too little,

much remains unsaid.

My best laid words

have not been

expressed

yet.

 

Author notes

Brittle showed me some forms I wasn't aware of, so I thought I'd have a go at some of the simpler ones.

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  • Luciferschild
    March 1

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    very nicely done, though i have to say i favor the first poem a bit more than the second but they are still bot excellent writes

  • the chase
    June 20, 2006
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    Oh, lol. I forgot that was part of the form.


  • Forms of Me
    June 20, 2006
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    The imagery and feeling are both nicely and well conveyed in both writes. We feel you have effectively expressed what you wanted your readers to feel and see.

    The only finding fault we have is that your title to the rictameter should be as the rules of most sites state the same as the begining and ending word.


    We really appreciate your entry into our contest. We both wish you the best of luck in the contest and all of your writing endeavors.




    Larry and Liz

  • the chase
    April 7, 2006
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    LOL. We've got to stop meeting like this.


  • individuality gold member
    April 7, 2006
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    arr brittle was me i merged the id into this one


  • Mystrvs De Asgard
    March 21, 2006
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    No you are...and you are the best.

  • the chase
    March 21, 2006
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    You are biased !!~ HEE.


  • Mystrvs De Asgard
    March 21, 2006
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    It better go to your head, because Like I say all the time...You are the best.


  • Pretty Escape
    March 15, 2006
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    Those are nice

  • the chase
    March 15, 2006
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    Aww, thank you for lavishing all that praise on me. Careful, it may go to my head ;]


  • Anna Kay
    March 15, 2006
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    Actually I find Rictameters (as well as most short forms) pretty hard to do - they need to be well crafted to still convey some meaning and expression, and you certainly managed to do so here. The whole poem has a great sense of drifting about it. I also liked the nonet, though - "My best laid words have not been expressed yet" certainly is one phrase that captured my eyes and which I love a lot - always on the search for new and better words I wish that my form experiments would turn out that nicely as well!

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