If I told you that I loved you
Would you accept the way that I feel?
Would you open up your heart to me
And let me prove to you that it’s real?
Would you tell me the same
And take the moment seriously?
Or break my heart
And leave mysteriously?
I want you to know the way that I feel
I need to know if what we have is real
If not, what must I say or do
To prove to you just how much I've fallen in love with you?
There is something in my heart
That I must share with you
Just open up your eyes and see
How much I care for you
There is so much that I feel
Whenever we’re together
And I don’t ever want to lose you
Darling, let’s stay together
I’ll do anything that you ask me to
As long as you are there
To comfort and hold me
With your tender love and care
I’ll show you a world
Where love is a part of life
Not just for a minute
But, for the rest of your life
I’ll always stand beside you
In everything that you do
And whenever you feel unsure
Remember that I love you
You’ll never have to be afraid
Of anything anymore
Just close your eyes and look beyond
Let our love open up another door
To another place in time
That only we will know
A place where we can live as one
Where our fires of love will grow
Let us remember the way
That we feel for each other
For deep down in my heart
There could never be another
To fill my heart and soul
The way that you always do
With endless laughter, joy
And the ability to pursue
Anything and everything
That I have ever wanted in life
Like having you beside me
As a friend, lover, and wife
With every breath that I take
With every passing minute
I’m thinking of way to spend my life
While having you in it
Trips and vacations
To destinations of your heart
Where we can live forever
Where out endless love will start
Where our dreams will become reality
Our work will all be done
And in the end it will be you and me
Looking back on the love that we’ve shone
I really do love you
And everything that you are
The light of my life
You are a shining star
I want you to know that I hold
A place for you in my heart
That is only yours and
Is set so far apart
From every problem, anger, and hurt
It is a special place unlike anywhere on earth
Remember this poem and everything that I have said
Whenever you’re weary or unsure in the days ahead
My heart is yours, oh if you could only see
Just how much I love you and how much you mean to me
I wish that you would let me see what lies within your heart
So that I could learn what it is that is keeping your heart
If you would only stop and try to understand
That there is so much more that I hold inside of my hands
It is a love so pure, honest, and true
That waits so patiently only for you
Author notes
This poem was one of the first I have ever written and entered in a contest on here. Everybody who knows my work and has read it has told me that this is the best love poem that they have read of mine.
This poem was written from my heart. It represents many qualities that I have and am looking for in a relationship. I believe in true love and know that it exists in each and every one of us. This poem means a lot to me and I thank you for allowing me to share it with you today! Thank you very much!
Written March 14th, 2006
A contest entry
- MOST IMPROVED POET! ANYTHING~ EVERYTHING by Florida Sunshine.
525 points, ended July 5, 2007, 74 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love. by I will stand by you.
600 points, ended October 30, 2007, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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spectacular....
love poem, with so much emotion, it really long, but sometimes it has to be, very well done
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this was great. Exactly what I was looking for. The person you wrote this for is very lucky. Keep up the great work.
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Some of the rhymes were a bit cliched but i actually felt as if i were the love you were speaking to. very expressive, you almost made me fall in love with you too.
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I can see the difference in the two ~ I am glad you choose to do two songs... Nice job! Thanks for entering the contest ~ best of luck to you!
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem~ Keep up the good work~ Good luck to you in the contest!
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Wow, my first impression when I started reading was "man that is LONG." I think it's impressive to write a poem this lengthy. This is a great love poem. Thank you for entering my contest.
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i love it keep it up
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great beginning.
good write. -
Thank you so much, I am glad that you enjoyed this piece!
Allen0826 -
beautifully written and i truely enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest and keep up the good work
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I wrote this poem on my own! I never stole it or borrowed any line from anyone anywhere.
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I've seen parts of this somewhere.... i am not saying you stole it but it looks very familiar, and too typical. I just think it could have been said differently.
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Thank you AAL for your comments, praise, and applause on my write! I appreciate it!
Allen0826 -
well written, powerful, moving love poem..:f
well written, powerful love poem my friend
I hope you've found that special love or will very soon. Take care..
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Well, I thank YOU for sharing it
It is, indeed, a beautiful love poem, on many levels. Your author notes explained WHY you wrote it, but doesn't really touch on the technical aspects associated with the piece, such as ... why rhyme? why left-aligned, why the metrical choice....These are all things I'd love to hear more about, so that I can better understand if these things happened by chance, by accident, or if there were deeper meanings associated with the choices you made when writing the poem. At any rate, I thank you for entering.
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Excellent
another powerful poem great word choose, I saw several thoughs, I would have probably made it several poems, But I still found it very enjoyable. WHen I want to tell a lady Ilove her I can wait for the kiss at the end of the poem that long. You have very power verse and you should continue to write what ever way that makes you feel good, I loved it I really did -
While the sentiment expressed here was truly heartfelt there were a couple of problems for me in the piece. The overall length for one and the arrhythmic stanzas were another source of distraction. I also saw a coulple of minor spelling errors which can be fixed quickly. This is not to say it's not a worth piece because it is. Obviously a lot of thought and effort went into writing this. I wish you the best on your continuing writes.
Sincerely,
Leo Long -
I’ll do anything that you ask me to
As long as you are there
To comfort and hold me
With your tender love and care
That truly shows how love can be blinding. I can relate to this piece so much, I just wish he could hear these words (with a few adjustments on the wife part,etc) Honestly if a man wrote this for me, and the presentation was good then I would be won over. Great job, the wording and the flow was perfect. Keep on writing.
Blessed be,
LeFay -
I liked this a lot. It wasn't so much the writing that got me, but the words and the emotion that was behind each syllable and phrase. It is almost captivating the love that you have for this person and if there isn't a person you are very emotionally intuned. Although I do have one suggestion:
"I wish that you would let me see what lies within your heart
So that I could learn what it is that is keeping your heart."
Instead of the second line maybe you could write, "so that i could learn what is keeping us apart." the word heart is beginning to get redundent and the rhythm seems out of place for these two lines. It doesn't flow smoothly. Other than that I enjoyed it. Keep it up and whoever this is for is a lucky lady. Great job.
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Thanks a lot for spotting that error! I just made the correction to it. I appreciate your comments on my work. Thank you!
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this is really beautifully written with lots of passion and emotion
brilliant write -
Beautiful
This is just beautiful, and I can't imagine anyone not getting misty over it, or wanting You for their own as a result of the beauty in Your words Josephine
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Very Nice
Nice Job, A bit long but put together well, and versed nicely. Very touching. -
excellent
I wish I could find words like these for the love that I feel for my soon to be wife. Execellent construction and flow, with only one slight error, that being "I’I've" which is one of my own most common errors when I am taken by a feeling such as you have shown here. Thank you very much. It was my pleasure to read this work. -
Simple and sweet. I'm inclined to agree, actually, with Inkwell, that your choice of words sometimes adds perhaps a syllable or beat too much to a line, breaking the flow... but it /is/ certainly a good piece, and I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing it with us.
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If you would only stop and try to understand
That there is so much more that I hold inside of my hands
It is a love so pure, honest, and true
That waits so patiently only for you<< when you say, say it with suggestive language...pure, honest and true (with sequential comma) in a way imply one another. Why waste words, when you can provide the same mental image with fewer words.
Overall, a very well written poem!
D
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Hi and welcome to Allpoetry. This is really beautiful you have put a lot into this and it is very emotional and soul touching. I am married with a husband and very much in love so I could relate to this. There are many types of love, the love a parent has for their child. The love of friendship. The love of a child for their parent and the love of God to name but, a few. Thia was a well written poem.
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I did more than enjoy this poem. It made me cry because it really touched my heart. The words expressed so much of what I feel for my boyfriend and father of my unborn child.You have a wonderful talent. Please continue to write so you can touch others the way you have touched me.
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