there in the pieces of Sunlight that
shift across the page,
in the shatter-scattered speckles sent
flying by Something small and metallic,
the almost-colored impression of a Shadow, cast by
translucence
(like Debussy)
--there i reveled
suspended in the delicate framework
of Suncircles on invisible particles of dust
before
she decimated the Silence.
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Written March 14th, 2006
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I know! I haven't been frequenting AP as much this year, because I'm so busy... Plus, I'm taking a Creative Writing class, which offers so much great criticism that I often forget to post without that little voice in the abck of my head that hums "you need criticism, go online..."
How are things?
Shannon -
I guess it is a little distracting; though I hadn't thought of that before you mentioned it. I just wanted to emphasize several words, and I discovered that all of them started with S, so I capitalized most of the s-words. Now I'm starting to have my doubts. Give it time, and they'll probably slim down to fewer s-capitals.
Thanks.
Haven't heard from/talked to you forever! -
hm... This was quite interesting. I loved the language, and can appreciate your capitalizing the "S"s, though it found the capitalizations a tad bit distracting... Any particular reason you chose to do this?
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