Dear mummy,
I saw you today for the first time in my life
I also saw my daddy with those tears in his eyes
For today was the first of many to come
Today was the start of my life that has just begun
You held me today with a softness beyond all
I trust with my life I know you will never let me fall
But just after an hour that I spent in your arms
My breath became heavy and they said my lungs where harmed
So they took me from you, from my soft place to fall
They took me away from my mummy, my daddy and all
They placed me like an animal in this tank full of tubes
And now I do not feel safe mummy and I really need you
I feel this air being foreced into my lungs
My life seems to be over and yet has only just begun
You sit by my side mummy
both day and night
Daddy holds your hands when you start to cry
I'm sorry mummy that your scared but I promise I will fight
To you mummy I promise that I will be alright
I'm trying to tell you this so much
I try to tell you with tears
That you will hold me again soon
But you just cannot hear
As you sit by my side and you talk to my dad
I hear your voice and am somehow relaxed
Your voice is so calming and is somehow so right
I just wish i could use mine to tell I WILL fight
You slept by my cotside when daddy went home
He had to look after my older brother and sister and so
You listned to my breathing even though it was so soft
And you told me how much you loved me and then you prayed to god
I heard your words through these plastic walls
I heard you ask him to watch over us all
I heard the tears fall when you started to cry
As you asked him to make sure that I was alright
Mummy, I will be and that is the truth
The bond is too strong between me and you
So when the day comes that you can hold me in your arms just like the first hour of my life
Remember that for a mothers love there isnt a battle I wouldnt fight
Love forever your newborn childxxx
Author notes
My little brother was born with something wrong with his lungs and although I was only one at the time, I've heard the story and seen the pictures and this is my interpretation of how he might of felt.
Oh and by the way he's 100% healthy now!
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hehe no problem, I do that sometimes in contests too. I hate it when the judge gets all moody with me for it, too. The remove is below the contest thing nearest to the right, the further away from the border. But yeah no probs, will take it off for you. Nice poem as well
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This is a sad poem. I almost dont want Anna reading this heh. But it does tug at the heart and is very expressive. Good job :] and good luck in my contest.
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awwww, that is so touching. it really touches and grips the heart close. a lot of people can relate to this...watching their baby struggle to live and wondering what is going on in the baby's mind. you did a great job writing this... it makes people see a different side of things. things in a baby's eyes. great job well done!!!!
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thanks ye my mum said pretty much the same thing i dont even no how it came to me coz i never experianced anything like that, that i would be able to remember apart from when my bro was born (i was 1) he had to be takin into special care coz his heart was unsteady (he was 2 weeks prem) n thanks 4 ur comment glad u lyked it xxx
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Oh wow, this is a very powerful write. Very heart wrenching, as a mother it made my heart just pound and my breath catch and I must admit brought a tear to my eye. Wonderful job,
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This is fucking sad! I mean when I first started reading it I was like "Oh, *YAWN* booorrinnngggg chilld birtth pooetrrryyyy..." But no! It was wonderful! I absolutely loved this and wish you the best of luck in this contest!
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OMG that was so incredibly heartgripping! It was so sad-it made me want to cry because it reminded me of when my little cousin Damon was born-he was really premature...it was so sad, everyone around him prayed and prayed that he'd be okay. I think the last line is my absolute favorite-that was deep. Amazing job with this, I loved it. Keep up the good work and thanks for sharing!
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