Love no stranger
Kiss no stranger
For a stranger’s kiss
May prove amiss
A lonesome dove
Avid for love
Strove to entrap someone
Despaired, as she found none!
Proud of her beauty vain
Her net she spreads for every swain
Approached a shepherd on the field
Who to her courtship would certainly yield!
Young miss Mary
While making merry
Kissed a stranger
And invited danger!
Developed high fever
Her throat sore
Her tonsils, painful angry- red
With extreme fatigue she was in bed
Petechiae on her palate soft
Her blood test positive: ’Monospot’
With doctor’s drug she developed rash
He thrashed her complaint as ‘simply trash’
Her painful, enlarged spleen and liver
Baffled her doctor as they were markedly tender!
The diagnosis of her malady her doctor could not ‘spot’
But pathological tests I am sure can certainly spot!!
Author notes
Written March 14th, 2006
A contest entry
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wow. This really struck an interest. I am very passionate about AIDS it is a scary topic, and in which case it hurts me more to think of all those out there who are taken foolishly by love, and come down with the disease. You must be careful with who you let love you, and especially by who you allow to "touch" you!
Thank you so much for sharing.
Good luck in the contest.
Have a wonderful day!
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I love this poem. My brother says "It's pretty cool". He's aware of my research project. Anyway, I love how you showed the physical evolution of the disease. You went into detail which is very much appreciated. Sam says "Hi..." He's a dork. Anyway, it was a wonderful piece, and it was very informative. Thank you and good luck.
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Confused
not quite sure why you entered this
particular piece in the contest.
It seems to be a bit of a turnoff if
someone is looking to infuse romance and
love back into their life. On the other
hand if that was your intentions then
you've made a bullseye!
The poem was poignant in that it
touched on a very real and serious
problem. Love these days can be lethal.
Many walk around with multiple diseases
and fail to tell their partners.
This causes paranoia and distrust between
people. A very thought provoking write.
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darell
This in fact is a medicosocial poem. I composed this to teach my medical students about the clinical picture of 'kissing disease' i.e. 'infectious mononucleosis'
this is the real clinical picture of the disease.
I am greatful to you for understanding, appreciating and commenting in depth
Dr. hemant Vinze
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It's a witty piece with some clever rhymes. You definitely have a few good things with the play on words. Good job, and good luck in the competition.
Justin -
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DDsithstriker
Thanks for appreciation
This is a medico social poem composed by me to teach my medical students
Dr. Hemant Vinze
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You know this poem of wisdom and wit has got to be the funniest yet most true thing I've read in AP. I love the words, the flow, the rhythm though not the rhythm I was looking for ...
You have simply astounded me (my spirit name is Dove). This poem I imagine is a hard one to fit into a contest but you have a work of art here my friend and I hope it gets read by many. I am intrigued as to the inspiration for this writing if you ever care to share...
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Barefoot Soul
I am really grateful to you for understanding this medicosocial poem composed by me to teach my medical students. I described the signs and symptoms of 'kissing disease' i.e. 'infectious mononucleosis'
If you desire to seek more information and explanation please feel free to write to me.
I have designed an illustrative power point slide show. If you write to me your e mail address I shall send you one
my email is
drvinze@hotmail.com
Dr. Hemant Vinze
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even though i know all the words...its still not that good. its has no flow at all.
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its not good.
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There were a few words I had to look up in the dictionary, but I like that because I can train my Dutch thinking mind then
this is a well written poem - thank you for entering the contest with it
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I am glad that I have appeased your intellectual needs, but still I am 'A STRANGER'.
drhemantvinze -
You sure hit my intellectual needs and then some. Smoosh.
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