Surrender, Now
Surrender, now, your soul to Me,
Offer Me your life.
There's nowhere else you'd rather be,
I'll keep you from all strife.
Surrender, now, your heart to Me,
Offer Me your love.
Within your cola pools I see
Devoted proof thereof.
Surrender, now, your mind to Me,
Offer Me your thought,
And I will teach you how to live
And serve Me as you ought.
Surrender, now, your arms to Me,
Offer Me your peace.
Show Me you will serve Me well
Until your heartbeats cease.
Surrender, now, your feet to Me,
Offer Me your strength.
I'm but a Man ... the strength you see
I draw from you at length.
Surrender, now, your hands to Me,
Offer Me your work.
A promise true to serve Me well -
A promise you won't shirk.
Surrender, now, your lips to Me,
Offer Me your kiss.
And in return, My loving touch
Will transport you to bliss.
Surrender, now, your life to Me
Offer Me your all.
I promise, My sweet little one,
To never let you fall.
Your surrender is a gift, you see -
A treasure more than gold.
I take you to protect you, now ...
And in My arms enfold.
Author notes
i would politely ask the R/reader to read this as a gentle coaxing by a Dom(me)/Master/Mistress, uttered during a collaring ceremony.
Written March 14th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Enter All Your Love Writes Here! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended March 8, 2008, 306 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I like this
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surrendering your love and devotion and trust too someone is a big step and should be taken with care. this is beautiful and so well penned. thanks for the entry.
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WOW!~ I truly enjoyed the penning of this
It is sweet and loving.. yet controlled. Very very inticing 
I truly enjoyed this!!
Melanie
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Obviously while in NADU these are simular to the words you wish from Me. You have penned the thoughts and emotions of your Master well. Very good little one, I am always pleased when you understand what it is I wish from you and with your writting ablitity you have shown O/others you truely understand. My mind moves forward to your r/t collar and hope I might be able to make its clipping on you as important to you as it is to Me .. Be safe in My absence but know I am with you always ..
Master Domt-one -
this is quite a stirring write that is sensual in all its loving glory to collar another is a gift that needs to be realished but also respected well done!!
love and light
blaze -
wow this is deep and very erotic. good job writing it.
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Oh WOW this is deep and very beautiful. I really love this poem. You have done an excellent job. Very, Very nicely written.
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.. very nice
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NIce work, fits the contest very well, and your note too. Good luck.
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great work
i love the repition line surender noy your....to me ! really powerful ! its ofcourse expressing surrender from soemone step by step very thoughtfully written ! amazing work ! keep it up !
i love dese lines
Surrender, now, your lips to Me,
Offer Me your kiss.
And in return, My loving touch
Will transport you to bliss.
cool n romantic !
way to go !
keep penning
preets -
This is a great peice. It's amazing. I love it
Mel
xoxo
'Keep Writing!' -
this is beautiful.
ahahaha this is what i wish to say to someone right now.
wonderfully writting piece hope you do well in the contest. -
It paints a beautiful image, truly beautiful. The repetition add power to the words. I did imagine it as if it was being whispered, carried under the wing of trust and love, straight to the heart of the matter. Keep on writing.
Blessed be,
LeFay -
i truly enjoyed reading this. this poem has something very erotic about it that i really admire, and i like that the subject of this work is something that i can generally relate to. thoughts are well-organized, poem is well-written. i applaud your artistic creation
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"Surrender, now..." - i love that you repeat this....
"Your surrender is a gift, you see - " - and this at the end...
very well written and thought through!
i really and truly enjoyed reading this.
the flow and wording go together so well!!!!
the best of luck in the contest!
B
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Nice work.
This is a great entry for this contest. Nice work. Very intersting indeed. -
Another great write entered. Good Luck!
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wow .. strong feelings.. beautifully penned! please read some of my poetry if you get the time.
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Great write, I can see the hypnotic sense in this write and find it to be very erotic. Thank you for sharing this with us and much luck in the contest..
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
hypnotic and secure
Ah, the trance...very nicely portrayed hun! Seductive yet forceful enough to leave no doubt as to his intent! Brava!
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i like the repetition. well done. the imagery pulls at you, too. great write!
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the irony is that anyone who surrenders must be strong both to make the gift valuable, and to fulfil the consequences of giving away the gift.
well written
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On reading this again, i find it's almost hypnotic in character ... as if the Dominant is trying to hypnotise or lull the submissive *giggles*
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Smiles ..well done princess ..I dont think I am "that" demanding ... but is nice to see that you do understand what it is I wish of you
James -
wow, love it, very deep!
~*Kris*~ -
Wow Master Domtos rose, this is totally awsome, you have embraced what a D/s relationship should be like in beautiful words.
jinkx
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