Shamelessly stepping
Into a faceless future
Clambering over the jagged ledges
Jutting out from the rocky crags
That cast shadows over my soul
Purposeful prevention
Of reminiscing a listless past
Chest heaving
Drawing breath from depths
I never knew existed
Thoughts echoing
Like the hollow words
Of a promise never intended
To be kept
Enduring devotion
Ingeniously designed to capitulate
At a moments notice
Explicitly and flamboyantly
Delving into the realms
Of a personality exploited
Regretful of the imperfections
And indecisions that placed me
Underneath the spotlights
Cautious indignance and
Subtle defiance
Proclaim my true self
Guiltlessly courageous yet bashful
Eclectic yet refined
Reclusive yet helpful
And thus
Unwilling to be defined.
Author notes
option #7: write about yourself/your life as a mosaic.
Written March 14th, 2006
A contest entry
- Mosaic by Ms. Black Eyeliner.
700 points, ended September 18, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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great job i love this poem
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Ah, yes, there he is my caring, talented, reserved but brilliant cuz of mine!
I think that you penned yourself very well and I bet you are like me and don't fancy writing about yourself but you have done it with beautiful style and alliteration making this a wonderful poem!
TY for sharing a part of yourself with us
and ty for being my cuz!
Lynda
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I do not think this is an ordinary man you have penned here Scott Sounds more like a very caring,big hearted, expressive and most talented man instead
It is difficult to write about oneself but you managed to capture and tease us with bits and piece of who is behind that brilliant pen of yours!!
So glad you did too!!
Beautiful poem Scott!
Jazzy
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This is a wonderful part of you.Thanks for sharing.
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wow - you seem to have a lot of insight into your inner self! I like how you expressed parts of yourself as almost contradictory but not quite - like saying you can be a good person without having to be perfect!
I also like the little touches of alliteration 'Purposeful prevention' you really do express yourself very well in this piece - and I loved how you ended it "Unwilling to be defined" It gave me a sense that you continue to grow and better yourself - that you will not stop and say ok this is me - my definite self and I will never change. The poem leaves your life open - continuing.
Well done
And I think you look very smart in your shirt and tie!!! although I'm quite baffled as to what that big pink thing behind you is!! -
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Great comment
Thanks for that wonderful comment showing deep understanding of the points I was trying to make. The photo was taken with an old camera of my mother's and when cropped and reduced in size to fit AP's pages got a little distorted. Behind me there is one of those naughty child dolls sulking against the bookcase and there is a hanging plant pot with a plastic ivy plant above my right shoulder. -
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ah yes I see her now - my aunt had one of those when I was really young - it was about as big as me and I was terrified of her because she never moved or spoke.
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WOW
a very en-depth view of ones self
very intriguing write.Revealing an
absolute inner being to be viewed
by others.Brave move I must say.
And you are a very nice looking
man to boot.Love the picture and
the little girl doll praying in the back,
nice color to go with your picture
Blessings to you
~Cheryl~
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WOW
WOW....this is a great write dear cousin. Well done. I can't believe I haven't read this before. I am so sorry bout that!!
Keep writing
Love Your Ap Cousin
Countrybabe
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Dude!
"Cautious indignance and
Subtle defiance
Proclaim my true self
Guiltlessly courageous yet bashful
Eclectic yet refined
Reclusive yet helpful
And thus
Unwilling to be defined."
Most bestest part of the piece, I really loved this. Thankyou for finding the link for me And nice pick of you too haha
This is really great, I love the way you can speak of yourself so bravely. 
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What a very exquisite piece you penned. I actually think it is one of the best I've read of yours. It has so much depth and flows like honey. Nice pic but one question...what is that thing behind you?...Trina
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You are adorable!!! How glad I am to have seen you, precious one. You have a sweet face and are very attractive. Any mum would be proud of you.
love from this old mum!! -
Honest and humble
Well, I agree with all of the above, and I can tell that's exactly the kind of man you are, as you say "I try to be as unpretentious as possible and muddle through this world with integrity intact" well done!! -
that was really cool... the last stanza ended it perfectly, it has alot of meaning to it.
well done,
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"Cautious indignance and
Subtle defiance
Proclaim my true self
Guiltlessly courageous yet bashful
Eclectic yet refined
Reclusive yet helpful
And thus
Unwilling to be defined. "
Wow!!! That last stanza just grabbed hold of my attention and wouldnt let go... a perfect finish! I loved the flow you captured with your words in this poem and I personally don't think you're "just an ordinary man"... I think your talent surpasses that level. Great job! -
amazing
Wonderful! This is a poem that has a lot of meaning and reality to it. I am impressed by your sense of truth here, even though I know you are very wise. This is well written, and just really great.
I read something about men before. It was something like:
"That man is a succes. He has lived well, laughed often, and loved much. He has gained the respect of intelligent men, and the love of children. He has always left the world better than he found it, whether by an improved poppy or a rescued soul."
There is more, but I can't remember it all.
Much love, as always,
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this is truly well written and thought out
this is truly wondeful
i encourage you to keep up the good work -
this is extremely well written. i applaud you for your very talented piece of writting.
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Thank you, many people try to be the kind of person others want them to be, I try to be as unpretentious as possible and muddle through this world with integrity intact.
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WOW .. this was so beautiful, yet so sad!!!!!
i really enjoyed reading this!!!!
the flow and wording goes so well together!!
great stuff!!
B
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Thank you for your kind words. Feel free to review more of my work. glad you enjoyed the read even though this poem was only posted about 8 mins before you reviewed it.
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Nice work!!!! very well written. Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work
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