Diamond dusted memories
Back lit by the silvery moon
Shining on Savannah
Murky cotton docks and mossy brick
Water slapping shorelines dimmed by
Memories in watery graves
Begging for different endings
To fairy tales that never quite
Rode off into the sunset
Always shrouded by fog and mist
Until
Suddenly clear for no reason
It appears to be too late
But that is too hard to think about
I will think about that
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Author notes
Wow- out of the clear blue sky came that one.........
Written March 13th, 2006
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Water slapping shorelines dimmed by
Memories in watery graves
I LOVE this. I haven't been on this site in almost a year and I came across all the wonderful comments you have left for my poems. Thank you so much for your wise words and your much-appreciated praise.
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Nice flow, deep meaning. I liked it. This line kind of bothered me though "Suddenly clear for no reason" It makes more sense by itself than it does with the "Until" before it. I don't know...maybe it's just me. Good job, though.
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Wow! this is a fantastic poem. The imagery is astounding and sooo very vivid. This is a treasure from your pen indeed. Thank you for sharing this one...and congrats on creating your "out of the blue" masterpiece.
Liz -
very well written
Very well written. I like the imagery you used to create the mood of the poem. I enjoyed this one.
etherealforu
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Good Job! It sounds like a bit of Gone with the wind or Midnight in the Garden of Good and Evil! Wonderfully written pice with heart and soul!! Applauds to you!
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a very enjoyable read. The imagery is vivid and you have chosen a unique format to end the poem with. Visually interesting. Nicely done.
Rory -
wonderful imagery..I really enjoyed it.
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Very well written this poem starts out strong and just gets better the first few lines
Diamond dusted memories
Back lit by the silvery moon
Shining on Savannah
absolutely brilliant
well done poet -
Julie
I love this I wish one would come to me out of the clear blue sky, lol
This one has georgeous images
Love and Hugs
Karen
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NIce imagery: Diamond dusted memories. Orignal and meaningful. Also good is:Memories in watery graves
I am slightly confused by:To fairy tales that never quite--had to read it several times. I think it is the capitilazation of the next line that through me.
Personally I don;t like tomorrow spelled out at the end. I think it would of been stronger as one line. IMHO.
It starts very strong but does not end quite as strong.
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This is a great piece dear friend.
Shahrzad
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Neat ending, unusual form used at the end too. Watery graves, misty fog,murky docks - very image filled poem as well,
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fantastc
Ilike this one! it is very very well written and the imagry is fantastic! I enjoyed reading this and look forwad to reading more of your work!
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