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Losing Myself

I lobbed off sections of my hair
with kitchen scissors,
hoping to find what was left
of myself beneath the strands,

and found myself standing in
a dark pond measuring months past
and moments separated from my mind.

And now I'm sinking deeper
into a dank misery,
the very same I've been
running from for so long.

I'm pulling, pushing, pedaling
to get out of this mess I've made and find
my way back to the person I want to be.

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Written March 13th, 2006

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  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    March 27, 2006
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    I love the imagery and the flow. I know that I have felt this way before and can relate to it. Great job!


  • kristin marie
    March 26, 2006
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    awesome, great descrptions, i too, like many, feel this way, geat job keep being strong


  • Aureola
    March 25, 2006
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    wow this one is very deep, it applies to so many people in our surroundings, sometimes without us even knowing about it. i loved the way you presented your despair as a pond. a pond is something you can drown in unless someone pulls you out in time. i know thats a bit of an exxageration but you get my point great write here and keep it up!


  • blondone
    March 24, 2006
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    Wow this is so good I feel this way myself. this is a well written well expressed poem, love this, one so glad I scrolled down in the feature box I'm out of free appaluses so I'll spend the 7 points cause this poem sure is worth it

  • considermegone
    March 20, 2006
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    Thank you! I appreciate you taking the time to read and understand it.


  • LittleAnn
    March 20, 2006
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    It took me some time to understand your poem *having needed a dictionary several times lol*, but now I understand it and I like it a lot! Great write!
    LittleAnn


  • Donielle21
    March 19, 2006
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    I like this poem. Full of imagination. I could actually see someone trying to get themselves out of a mess they had made. Great write!!


  • mynameishoneybee
    March 14, 2006
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    so full of emotions... wonderful use of words and the imagery is just great! the last three lines stood out to me :::

    I'm pulling, pushing, pedaling
    to get out of this mess I've made and find
    my way back to the person I want to be

    and in my opinion gathers and makes the poem what it truly is! great write. well done! hugs :-)

  • considermegone
    March 13, 2006
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    It is a true write; but just on current emotions. I'm not constantly wallowing in my own depression haha. And I did cut my hair short once, on a whim; I think it was a purely emotional action. Thanks for the comment; I'm glad you enjoyed it.
    Edited on Mar 13, 11:00 p.m. because 'I wanted to answer the question better'.

  • comet of 1989
    March 13, 2006
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    very good imagery!!! this poem is very depressing to be honest! I love it!!!
    "And now I'm sinking deeper
    into a dank misery,
    the very same I've been
    running from for so long."

    Is this a true write for you or did it just pop out of your head?
    well done, a very good write, i enjoyed reading it very much so!!

  • DJ Fairy
    March 13, 2006
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    this one is really good. it has great imagery.

    --kay <3

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