Oh moon with beauty beyond compare
I'm jealous of your light
It reflects in his eyes and you get to see
The windows to his soul every night
Oh moon you have to tell me
Is he happy in life where it is
Does he still look to you and see me
And think of me as his?
He said when I get lonely, the answer is simple
I could look up to you
For he will be looking and thinking of me
Oh moon, tell me it's true
I thought you were sending a signal
When I looked up to find peace
I felt a warm calm come over me
It was such a sweet release
I even thought I heard my name
Oh moon did he speak it out loud
Tell him I am standing strong for him now
Defiantly with my back unbowed
Tell him oh moon because I cannot
And the silence just hurts so much
Tell him I saw his clear sign to me
Tell him that I felt his touch
Please don't let him cry for me
Look down on him and smile
Dont let him know I am so weak
My strength has been beguiled
Oh moon I promised I would be strong
So pass your light to me
Reflect his beauty onto your surface
So with my eyes I can see
Tonight as he looks up to you
Let him basque in the glow of our love
And with your light, dry his tear
As he looks for me above.
Author notes
i promised you....i still do
Written March 13th, 2006
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a really powerful piece! I enjoyed reading the whole thing!! you did a great job with this poem! good luck in all of your contests!
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I really like this piece! It has a lot of imagery and emotion in it that makes it powerful. My favorite parts are stanzas 2 and 3 because those are the stanzas with the most imagery and emotion. I also like the flow and rhyming in this piece because it works well and isn't forced. The title isn't too clichéd and it works well with the poem, so great job with that. Great job and good luck in the contest!
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I liked the rhyme in the first few stanzas, but I think it broke down later in the poem. You have a good concept here, pretty good job.
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Thank you for your kind words.
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beautifully written...very sad...the flow was great, and I really like your wording here...Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
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How expressive and wonderful! Its has a sad sense to it but even that has been well portrayed and is excellent. You're writing style is fgorgeous. I would love to spend a day in your brain if this is what you can cpome up with. Good Job, Keep on writing.Be well Poet.
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your pain, your love, your hope. it all came through in this poem. and it's so true, everyone in the world can see the moon, the stars. we all have that in common. i love your poem.
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Wow, what a wonderful poem. I really dont know what to say...just wow, I love it.
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Beautifully written and expressed. Such sadness in this piece but with the hope layered underneath of a plan to come. Excellent imagry and flow, great job!
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Beauty. Not expected at all. Encompasses an emotion PERFECTLY. Wonderful emotions as well. I thoroughly enjoyed this.
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*crys* beautifully done
i love this poem i am amazed at your writing gret job
forgive me if this is wrong but is this about someone dieing???
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