Am I really fearing that I am?
Or just that I might be?
Have the many pains I've felt,
only existed in some book of mystery?
Is there such a thing as time?
Or is it just a concept?
In a real ones unconscious mind,
and my ageing his latest neglect?
Am I really nothing more,
than a shadow no one sees?
Or am I existing flesh alive,
who was always here to be?
Can I write myself into life,
of seen,felt and cared for?
Or am I that spicy bit of tripe,
he devoured before this dream?
~~~ Suseann~~~
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Not real sure if this was the contest topic.If I've mistook your intended topic,I'll delete. Just let me know.~~Suseann
Written March 12th, 2006
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Great poem suseann, good questions within too, well done, I liked this piece. Keep up the fantastic work.
best wishes as always
xElectricEyezx
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Andy,it's about existance in reality or not. Like are any of us truely here for real or only existing in someones dream. An altered sense or level of existance. Hope that helps. Kinda like that tree in the forest falling,but if no one saw or hears it fall.Did it?
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Sometimes hot, sometimes not. I write and write hoping to write things which are really good. I have been stuck in what seems like mediocrity lately.
I like your poem, but I really didn't get it. I think it is me. Sometimes it is just that way.
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good poem, Suseann, and it seems to relate that it is by those questions to ourselves that we do grow and change...and very much in line with the contest theme! I like that you took the perspective of a dream to write this poem--very unique.
best wishes to you in the contest!
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As Zayra points out, there is no "right or wrong" entry, since perception is the rule of the day. Therefore you certainly must keep this in.
You raise much thought about philisophical type questions that have "plagued" mankind since the very beginning. Who? What? Why? When? Where? I love the opening line, as this is the ultimate question, and the one whose answer is self evident, yet "disbelieved" by so many. Great entry, suseann!
peace
doug
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This fits right into the contest theme. There are inherent questions for us within our journey of evolution and transformation. Thank you for entering it. I will come back around later to comment more. But please keep it in.
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