You cut
Then slice
You bleed
Smile,
You like the pain
The blood flowing
Down your arm
Dizzy,
You watch
As the blood
Drips to the floor
A puddle forms
Relief,
Your life of hell
Slowly fades
The pain of life
Will soon
Be over
Darkness,
You’re lead
Down a dark hall
No light at the end
Of the tunnel
Finally,
You make your way
Through a door
Where you are damned
To spend eternity
Again,
Your master
Awaits you
Only four words
Has he
“Welcome to Hell, again”
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Written February 6th, 2003
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This one makes me shiver and tear up all at once. It was so sad. The ending was really sad. Is there no way to get away from Hell?
Always and Forever,
~Kendal -
very interesting. I only wish it had been drawn out a little longer but I say that about all poems I like. For some reason I hate to let the good ones end. .;o)
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this is really good also i definatly know how it feels to cut
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I agree and it is actually about a young guy I used to talk to that enjoyed doing it. Stupid kid. Hugs and bites, Lady Raven
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Seeing as you entered this contest i'm going out on a limb to say that i find it amusing that some of the above commenters think that this is actually about YOU cutting and your regret when in fact it's a parody...LOL Wow!!
Anyhow...good luck with the contest!
Cheers!
Laura -
awesome poem. the ending was really good when u said again cause so many people think this is hell on earth. Has a lot of emotion. good write.
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this is really good, and for all the scars and cutting I do, I may be condemned to be a demon in this life and the next...Really great write though
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im sorry it does that to ya. i see it in black text tho. huggles and very glad u liked it. Lady Raven
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I like this one. People really think it's hell on earth, but they have no idea!! I really like this poem.
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Great poem. Granted, hard to read due to the whiteness of both page and text, but well worth hilighting and reading like that.
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Wonderful
~Wow~
I know you have talent, but this poem is so close to my life.. I am a cutter (self-harmer). I have also burned myself, and most people dont get why I do it.
I do it becuz of my hellisj life, and since I cant always write poems when Im upset, I turn to my razor and lighter..
Keep writing, you have alot of talent, and your poems calm me in a sense.. -
yep yep.... miss that feeling
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short sweet and to the point, imagine that, life is hell, but if you kill yourself you end up there for real. Something to think about.
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omg im starting to cry...i love it. thank you so much for letting me read it. I am only 13 years old, yet i know what its like to almost die from suicide. I was only 7...the only thing i remember was i just wanted to be with my grandmother in heaven so badly. I know what its like to wake up and not know where you are. Ive been so close to dieing so many times before...idk...i wish i could start over again. I would change so many things. I would fix so many lives. And i definitly wouldnt have let my little 4 yr old niece walk in on me while my neck was slit and i was bout to bleed to death...i dont know what i was thinking. to have such a young child go through such horror. But with everything ive been through i wonder...if i could start over...would i really do it any differently? Would you?
~Mojo~ -
now that is an awsome poem if i don't say myself! lots of imagery and feeling something i can relate to good job......kitty
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This is great babe..It does give much relief..
But suicide..what a sin..
Beatifully dark write!
twizted bizkit -
Thanks for pointing this to me... I do understand a little more now. I just feel so full of sorrow for any one who does this. I feel the longing for it but I'm too chicken lol. Sorry don't mean to joke. I just get scared for people ya know? This is a great explaination for something that maybe cannot be explained.
~Destiny~
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hey, this was a really good poem...i really liked it and i can relate alot since i'm a cutter! it had a good flow, but nothing was forced. good write, check out some of my stuff sometime!! peace
**hannah -
Woah what a great talent. You are such a good writer. I like alot of your work. And I am sure you hear that alot. But it is very fun to read!
Krissy -
Wonderful style, I love this poem so much.
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darksoul
stole my comment.
*grins*
*claps*
all is good though.
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This is a great poem. You are such an incredible poet. You have such great imagery and vocabulary. You are already one of my favorite people now you're becoming one of my favorite poets. I love this one
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exceptional write... truly powerful.. i really like the last line "welcome to hell again"... trying to escape your hell of a life to just end up going to a worse hell... brilliant!
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Utterly speechless....
You're going on my favorites list right now.
Powerfull write.
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It's very dark. But I love it none the less. I have an infatuation with dark poetry, dark thoughts and bad deeds..
This was done perfectly
"Welcome to hell, Again".. My sentiments exactly!!
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