When I'm by your side I feel secure
Your love makes me want to endure
Mom, with you I'll stay till I mature.
I'll try and use wisdom to discern
And with your strenght I'll try to learn
How to grow up and always be stern.
So please mom don't let me leave now
I'm begging the best way I know how
Tell your master that it you'll disallow.
A circus freak, it sounds so rough
Mom, please I beg you,be tough
Stand up for me that'll be enough.
Time is up, he's coming here
Mom, I'll never again be near
So I love you I hope that is clear.
~*Goodbye my dear and know that I
want you to stay, I quietly sigh....
so do not fear and please don't cry.
I love you baby remember this
I'll always remember our last kiss
So goodbye and you I'll forever miss*~
Author notes
I got the impression by looking at the picture of this little elephant and his mom, that this was the last time that they were ever going to see eachother again, so I wrote in that frame of mind.......~*Love will continue no matter where it takes you*~
Written March 11th, 2006
A contest entry
- Contest for 10 to 14 year olds ONLY by wishintreeUK.
300 points, ended March 19, 2006, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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kim that was one of the best poems you have ever written. i truely love it. i know im never on here but i just wanted to read your poems. and see how you've been doing with writting. your tuely getting better and i really love this poem. lylas and miss you!
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Very good work! I love it. Very sad though.
Keep writing. You are very gifted.
God bless you
RH -
i applaud you! i clap for you for rhyming every line. that must of been hard, even when you had to still get your point accrss! great~!
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Thank you for your entry to my contest, I am saving all comments until after the contest, that way everyone will have a fair chance
~Katie~
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This is so sweet! The rhyming and everything about this poem is simply wonderful! This is the first contest you've entered into, but this poem is definately worthy of any trophy. It is very original and creative of you to write a poem based off of that picture... I looked at the contest and I couldn't believe that this poem was inspired by that picture, but indeed it was. You have so much potential for the future with this kind of writing now. Wow.... best of luck to you in this contest!
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Awww! This poem is so sad! Very good writing!!!
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I did, I'm dorry, I didn't mean to sound like I was attacking your writing. It was good.....*
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~*Chelsea*~
Edited on Mar 11, 4:56 p.m. because ''. -
Thanks for being honest. I did not think of this poem that way while I was writing this. I guess your right, but if you read my author comments you would see that I truthly got the idea from the picture.
KIMBERLY -
wow this is intense, yet it made me think of Dumbo, except in a better story line. In dumbo, the mom has to leave, yet everyone can still see her. Yet in this, I get the feeling of complete seperation of a mother and a baby. This is so good, very much feeling in this and well written. Good luck in this contest Kim!
~*Chelsea*~
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